Ive tried to read this, I tried so hard I wanted to like it but I felt there was too much inconsistency for my liking. Sending Harry into danger again and again for what felt like no reason except to traumatised him for the story.

You write really well and this story had a lot going for it, but I'm sorry. I hope I like another story. Have a great day.

Dumbles...is not smart. He's still impulsively demanding his spy to do things that could lead to him being compromised yet expecting for prompt results and automatic success. How has he stayed a shadow king for so long if he's like this with everyone? Even if he uses memory spells a lot for slip ups how has half his plans not blown up in his face from his rashness?

Alright interesting as this is I'm a little confused. What exactly has this group been doing? In what ways are they actually fighting Dumbledore. And how is Dumbledore still alive with all these people he doesn't know are against him? I mean you have all these skilled people in this group with a vast array of abilities, knowledge, and resources. And no one has attempted to assassinate Dumbledore? No one able to be close to him un-suspiciously has killed him through any method of wacky or sneaky means? If it's about making others know his deeds that could be done after his death. I just don't get it.

I'm really sorry, but as much as I love the premise, the characters, and the way you write (really, you are a gifted writer and storyteller,) I just cannot continue reading this story. Its turning out to be VERY triggering for me in a way I haven't experienced in a long time. With one sexual assault and near rape and now finding out that there will be another with Dumbledore, along with my inability to understand why Harry/Luke's family would allow him to not only go back in the first place to the Dursleys, let alone back to Grimauld or even Hogwarts, really, with him having been so brutally hurt and with the danger Dumbledore and those loyal to him pose. Honestly, if I were in their place Harry would be with me, safe, no matter how hard it makes things; but that's just me. Please do not think that my lack of understanding or opinions are in any way an intended insult or even criticism on your writing - like I said your an amazing writer and your use of foreshadowing and characterization is superb. I just cannot handle the thought of another sexual assault - or really any more abuse on Harry - happening when Harry could be safe and with his parents in Bulgaria. It would really just be too much for me.

Thank you for all the time you spent writing this, as I really did enjoy the main parts and the build-up of the oncoming snarry relationship. You are a fantastic author and you are appreciated. I am going to look at any other works you have. And again, I really am sorry for pulling out and basically abandoning this story.

Thank you and Happy Writing!
Stormy

Apollos is French in English it's Apollo

Gotta love how everything played out. Dumbles really got what was due him in the end. The story was masterfully written and was a pleasure to enjoy it. Thanks! Definitely a keeper and a gem.

He can't be dead the Phoenix is immortal he will gave survived one way or another.

One down one to go. I though it was either Remus or Sirius who would fight that one would stay for the twins?

What about the tunnel in Zonkos no one knew about it till the twins found it after buying the place could they yes it to evacuate the town to the school?

I'm not surprised at the snake form, especially after hearing that both grandfathers were snakes. Will it finally be enough to get Dumbledore out of the school...naybe he will get killed in the confrontation to arrest him. Will those memories be of all the rapes if all the kids?

Beautiful name.
Really Bill actually married a twelve year old and had sex with her as welll...if I was Percy I would definitely think if changing his last name.

I think Lucius needed that to connect one more time with his father and to meet his grandfather for the first time. Five generations

I thought Tom was evil...I swear he's a pussycat compared to Dumbledore.

If Ginny was his daughter that not only makes him disgusting but despicable for killing off both his children.

Another prophecy sheesh! Hopefully Ajax protected Harry and the stasis charm protected the baby.