Lov it

I am guessing you are trying to follow the show with this story because everything fit ok with the original story untill the flashback. I had to read the flashback again to figure out witch parts didn't fit. I guess it is because these things are normaly associated with weddings in western culture. Maby you missed this as well...

Anyway,

I think you forgot a few cultural things:

1. "Suddenly, everyone turned towards the back of the church and saw Suki dressed in a snow-white bride's gown"

Just thought I would remind you that they wouldn’t have churches in the avatar world. Churches match with the Christian religion and western culture. The avatar world fits in more with the east. In the avatar world they have spirits not gods or a God.

2. Oh, and I don’t think they had maids of honor or bridesmaids either. We don’t know much about the weddings in the avatar world (annoying huh), but try looking in Asian cultures for wedding ideas or traditions. You could even make up a few. Our wedding ceremonies don’t fit with the cultures of the avatar world. Just thought I would add we do see some of Avatar Roku's wedding you could also get stuff from there.

Just saying because everything seems to fit the show ok so far. (Somthing I like to see when reading fanfiction.)

I love the story so far, from what i've read of course. its proably already finished. i read this a few years ago and found it again :) it reminds me of what i want to have when i'm older. Anywho, regarding the story, you might wanna try starting a new paragraph everyime someone new starts speaking. ex:

"hey, there!"

"Oh hey, what's up?"

"Nothin' new; rapin' an elephant."

you know what i mean? haha. Great story. very in character for each of them.

this was an awesome story! you should make a sequel. it could be about suki and sokka moving and they have kids or whatever. but i give this five stars. check out my ATLA fics.

oh sequel!

Great story I can't wait to find out what's going to happen while Aang is away with Zuko.

really good story, my pudding cup. i love the kataang scenes. Mostly because of the way theu're written; they're sweet but not to the point of pervyness. i have to agree with the others about the dialogue is written between characters. Overall, great story and i cant wait for the sequel!

This story sounds really good so far! The only comment i need to make is that you spelled Suki wrong. Is not Sukki it's Suki.

This was fantastic! I can't wait for the sequal!

w00t there getting the boomeraang squad back!

SEQUEL! YAY!

Cute story! I love your writing. By the way, it's spelled 'Suki', not 'Sukki'.

Was Sokka right? Please write more so I can find out!

First of all, cool! Second, when someone new starts talking, you have to make a new paragraph. It makes it easier to read and is grammatically correct.

This is a good story. I always thought it would be interesting to see what the GAang would be like after they split up. It would be nice to see some tension between them. After all after a few years, they'd probably change. Also, I have some advice. While this story is written well, it would be easier to follow if you split up the dialouge. After one character speaks, move to the next line for another character. It makes it easier to understand. It's also proper litterary format. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.

~Atolia