I like the idea for this story. I also like that Arianna's behavior isn't from being attacked. It's an interesting twist. Can't wait to read more!

This sounds really intresting. Write more.

Hey, I quite like this. What I would suggest however is to watch your consistency for tenses in the separate years, there were some bits where you swapped a bit. I am intrigued enough to read the rest.

This was very original and well thought out. However, I do have this to say: GET WORKING ON ENTERNITY! You are killing your readers I’m sure..

But back on this, I think you have Albus’ characterization down to a T, not something many people can accomplish.