Disappointing is all I can really say. it could've been a good story but you didn't understand what you were talking about at times and therefore didn't explain why things were different in your story. The audience doesn't know what you're thinking. You have to explain things, not just random BS fuinjutsu.

The ending was simply to shaky and convoluted. Konoha"s fall came far to swiftly. And the sheer idiocy that the Hyuga would flee to Kumo of all places is insane.

Should a bloodline score even be added in your ranking? It seems dumb. I could set it giving bonus points but not taking any away. I also don't see two tails Naruto as powerful as you.

Even being a few hours out, civilian speed mind you, they still would've known a ninja patrol could've picked them up.

Oh, and just a thought aren't Naruto and Tayuya way young to be acting as a CIVILIAN married couple owning a shop. They wouldn't be considered adults until they were sixteen or eighteen in that universe. Any henge or genjutsu is out because the first sensor they come across would spot them.

Your ending note once more demonstrates your lack of knowledge about the source material. To be fair, I've enjoyed the story pretty well. It's fairly unique. Sadly, it's also really sloppy and didn't make sense at times. This was also the second time you used the, "sadly they didn't do this or they might've noticed that," bit. It's like you've made the pair really adept shinobi unless that didn't suit your purpose at a moment, then they make really careless mistakes. Is character consistency really too much to ask for? I mean: they would've been on high alert so not being aware of their surroundings like the end of this chapter suggests is overconfident, arrogant and stupid.

Your power descriptions don't line up well with what the two have been able to accomplish. One thing that really irritates me though is the genjutsu bit. It is mentioned numerous things in the series that normal genjutsu are basically useless on jinchuriki. I can see Naruto not identifying one, but not having one cast on him. I truly wish you'd known the material a bit better. These small, yet critical, errors are ruining this story for me.

Could anyone who became one of the seven deadly swordsman really become one if the seven swordsman? Not to mention how he overpowered kakashi without the mist.

You say naruto trained with the Kyubi chakra over the years. That's the deal he made. Now he seems like a complete novice. Story inconsistencies like that irk me.

Just noting her. The way you talk about hiding their chakra, that should disable Naruto's ability to hide his true appearance.

Mr Coughs-a-lot being in charge of a stealth assassination team sounds like a bad joke

I think you're downplaying Sasuke's obsession with power. The reason it got so bad after Orochimaru is because he had always thought he wad stronger than he wad. Sasuke believed his sharingan was the ultimate power; that's why he didn't get crazy after the Wave incident. You see; in both Wave and the Chunin exams he learned that he wasn't as strong as he thought. Difference is, he only got the sharingan after Wave. Orochimaru and the Chunin exams taught him that just having those eyes wasn't enough. That's why he was
so much worse then, imo.

Wow... just found this story.
I might read the whole thing...

This is a really good story, which makes it all the more sad that after I finish next chapter, there won't be any for who knows how long. But with the fact that Sasuke said the Uchiha aren't killed that easily, doe he not realize his entire clan was decimated in one night by, publicly, one person? Update soon.

an old classic. So far it's great and refreshing. I get that this fic is abandoned but sometimes one needs to enjoy the unfinished classics.

Great story I hope you finish it or add on to it soon!

Cool story. I hope you decide to finish, or at least add to it.

what the hell?! when do you plan on finishing this?!