~ I find your writing sophisticated and enticing. You truly captured the mood of first time nerves, and portrayed Bella's insecurities perfectly, in my opinion. This story is what I would imagine Stephanie writing. It was truthful, and correct in the facts. Such as Bella's nonexistant knowledge of what is normal for a man's member size is. I commend you for your obvious writing talents and hope you write again.~

Yours Truly,

Raine

Nicely done for Bella and Edward's first time.

just wanted to say great story-well written

Aww, that's really sweet (: well done, written seriously well!

I think you captured the first time thing well from Bella's POV. You know, when SM wrote the part that had Bella turning down Edward in the meadow at the end of Eclipse, I thought WTF! We know that girl would have jumped his bones in a heartbeat. lol

loved it

beautiful.

that was great. I think you really captured how a first time is,(well, without going all the way) The shyness of her, how a girl will feel the first time she's naked infront of her boy. How everything is new, and you really don't know what to do. I've read a lot of stories of how this will go with them, the first time, and they are so unrealistic, like they where pros, haha. Also

I really like that they didn't go all the way, but start to discover eachother. Very well writen. Emocionally, love it.

Loved it and I can totally see it happening.

I really enjoyed your story. Reading the M rated stuff is a bit of a fixation for me at the minute, but so much of it is totally OOC, even when trying to be IC.

I think you really succeeded in what you set out to do - picking up that nervous vibe. Even though this story was full of detail it didn't feel 'smutty' - which means to me a bit dirty. There was a real innocence to it.

I'll look forward to our delectable Edward's POV.

This was a good story. Definitely their personalities and though its a subject a lot of people do, it had it's own personality. Its nice to see something different than just the usual and you've done that. :)

"I hope this story was enjoyable..."

Ya think?

lol

Great story. Loved it!

Great job. You did a great job of keeping them both in character.

I chuckle at your worried babble at the end of this story. For I found that you did an exceptional job at portraying bella and how she would be so flustered and nervous.

And there is nothing wrong with the gutter, you can always find nice shiny things there.

Great! Love it! Very well written!