i thought it was really interesting how u linked the two events together - occasionally though it made for some confusing reading when the switches were maybe a few sentences apart, but i did like how it emphasised the parallels between these two events. i think it could've been a more impactful story if there had been some divergence between the two events and the difference in the antagonists' particularly: ed as a kid versus ed as someone who has had significant fighting experience would make for more high stakes than what was shown. ty for writing this!

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ahhh this is so good!

I really liked it and the way they mirrored each other. It was cool to read and I liked the part with Hoenheim and Mustang mirroring each other because it made Roy feel like a dad and I thought that was cute. It was fun to read!
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I love how you linked the sentences and dialogue from one story to another. It really drew out the parallels. Very entertaining. However, Ed is right: Mustang is never going to let him hear the end of this.

This was cute :3

It would be a nice contrast story if there was any contrast in it. As it is it's just one story told twice for no reason other than to tell the reader that after years of martial arts training and work in the military Edis still is as helpless as a little child... Yeah, no.

That was a really cool story telling style and a super cute story. I love the stories that talk about Honenheim and Mustang or directly compare the two. Anyway, this was great.

This story is pretty good. I like the parallel idea, but I feel like things would be different when Ed is older. He knows how to fight, particularly against larger opponents (frequently spars with Al) if you recall Ed and Al's fight Ed can do pretty good without alchemy. I know the guy had a knife but Ed has automail. Also why didn't Mustang arrest him... I like the idea, but it makes the characters a little ooc.

Awesome! I love it, great job with Mustang and Ed!

That was cool how you mixed both the past and the present. Poor Ed, I guess he was almost kidnapped twice but his father / fatherly figure rescued him twice too! Adorable. It was written very well and in a very unique way. Awesome work!

Well done.

That was...interesting. Especially your style of writing. I feel that Ed is in dreamland though, in fact, /I/ feel like I'm the one in dreamland, watching ( reading ) the world ( this fic ) from some kind of distance. All in all, quite an intrigue story and unique experience.

aww soo sweet :P

...I cannot believe this was written by you Jen! :D (I still can't believe that after all these years of not updating you STILL get reviews on your stories...) I was an awesome story. :) I liked how it went from past to present.