man this is so awesome i never really considered susans POV until i read this, very well done

Fantastic.

I love the conversation between Susan and Aslan. I would not have the capacity to write it out- hence I implied things.

I especially liked when Susan got angry at Aslan. Why? Because I admit to feeling exactly the same just as often.

Excellent job.

i love this!

I like this story very much.

The change in Susan and her getting back with her loved ones.

The happy ending for Susan I missed at the end of Narnia.

I love this story. It's always so great to read about how Susan had a good life and still got into Narnia with the rest of her family in the end. Great job!

Wonderful piece of writing! I absolutely loved it.

I loved this! Susan got to go to her family, Aslan still loved her, what more could you ask for?

well i didn't bother reading chapter two after i saw that it was just the original of chapter one, but i loved chapter one...made me cry sob sob

Wow. That's all i can really say. Wow. You are a most excellent writer. You had me actually crying in parts. I love it, and it's totally worthy of any Narnia title.

I remember once where Farla was hammering into me how evil (not that she believes in good and evil of course) the chroncles were.

And that how it was the tom boy girl who kept her faith (thus the more male one) while it was the girly girl who abandoned her belief that the world behind the wardrobe was real.

Personally I feel she was breathing something into something else that wasn't there to begin with, but it's nice to see a story that extends on C.S. tale.

And isn't an empty headed 'new evil' story.

A sweet and beautiful story. I love the conversation between Susan and Aslan. The end almost made me cry! Great writing!

Great story.

And Luhtalitukka, the peoples didn't die, they went to heaven.

BRAVO!BRAVO! Oh I absolutely LOVED your story! It was absolutely wonderful! There are some books where it ends and I say, oh I do wish I knew what happened next! Although you could have gone into the whole story of her life there, which, no doubt about it, would be absolutely exciting and beautiful, when I finished this story, only one chapter long, I was completely satisfied! Once again, you did a wonderful job,not a thing wrong with it at all!

It's been so long since I read the Narnia series, but I still remember how brusquely Susan was just left behind. One of her brothers, was it, just brushed her off saying that she was too engrossed in her neons to care at all about Narnia, and though I love the series, I've always disliked that part b/c Susan was one of my favorite characters. The Lion, the Witch, and the Warobe was one of my favorites of the series, and Susan was one of the original children to go into the world...I've always been fond of the "original four" (well not technically original, b/c of Polly and oh his name started with a D). Ok I'm just blabbing on at this point, but it's a wonderful piece of work, the epitome of how fan fiction is *supposed* to be-a pleasant and meaningful addition to a piece of work. Susan is captured well here, and it's a satisfying and mature take on what happened.

I found this story really nice. Enlgihtening even. I love the way you redeemed Susan ;-)