Fifth paragraph from the start there are word(s) missing at the beginning of the sentence. Sadly, that's just the first of many such missing words in this otherwise shocking and suspenseful story. The missing words act like a speed bumb against the flow of your story. If you ever see my reviews, my hope is that it annoys you enough to make the corrections. You're too good of a storyteller to let carelessness disrupt your readers from fully immersing themselves in your stories.

That guy was an offensive creep and it's a shame Amanda decided to wait for Lee's return to out him. She came too darn close to losing her life by waiting. It's too high schoolish for me to believe Lee would use a cigar band for an engagement ring. He and Amanda are in their thirties! Glad he popped the question.

Fabulous story! You are an awesome writer :)

I'm not sure that you could improve any on this story. It was really great! I enjoyed it immensely.

I realy enjoyed this story untill the serious warping of "reality" at the end.

Wow! This story really had me hooked. It is WAY past my bedtime, yet I couldn't stop reading this once I started. This was very suspenseful. A few times I was yelling at the computer screen (not that it did me much good : )). Anyway, I really enjoyed this story. Keep up the good work.

Wonderful! I loved it!

I loved the story. It was awsome. You'r a good writer.