Nice brotherly moment.

This was really great - a very good story, in both parts. Thanks for writing!

Great story and loved the way Aslan came to help him and then Petr comes to find him and start to rebuild their relationship.

Beautiful. Just...BEAUTIFUL!

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-Dyslexic Nerd

I like your way of write the emotions of the characters, sweet and calm

I know this is old, but with Voyage of the Dawn Treader coming out I couldn't help, but read some Narnia fanfiction. I just wanted to say that this is brilliant, and worded beautifully. I admire it very much. You should definitely do some Voyage fanfic once it comes out, I think we would all appreciate that.

As usual, you characterized the brotherly interaction perfectly.

As for Aslan, I have no idea how you translated the feelings of wonder, awe, and warm fuzzies I get at Church to the Lion, but this is probably the best portrayal of the King of Kings I have ever read. Edmund's fascination with untangling the burr from the Lion's mane was almost symbolic. I loved it.

Cheers!

Icey.

Oh, that was awesome! :) The emotion felt so real, and the way they talked was so... natural. Great work, as always.

Sigh. So beautiful!

I really enjoyed this story. I felt like you really grasped the characters' voices.

Beautiful!

Very nice. I loved how you built up on the relationship between the two. It was great. I also love the detail you put in here. It was great. Look forward to seeing and/or reading more of you in the future.

Once again, great job!

As Always,

Desi

It's beautiful!

Luna

2 Cute!