Haha, I really enjoyed your fic. Mary Sue parodies can be humorous when done properly, and by golly you have done so! I really enjoyed seeing another person share my same views on Mary Sues and that rant board you had on your profile.

But yes, "I just had the creepiest feeling."

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"I think we're all doomed."

I loved these lines.

LOL. Wow. This is hilarious and really well-written. I usually despise (supposedly) humorous stories or 'parodies' but I made an exception and started reading this when the summary threw me off, and I'm so glad I did. Amazing work! It's very creative.

If I had to give a bit of critiquing, it would be two things: first, make sure that you 'mary sue' words aren't so badly spelled that no one can read them, because while it makes sense from a 'mary sue' point-of-view, it makes the story difficult to follow. (i.e.-'goofik' It took me two or three minutes of staring at it to realize it meant 'gothic'); secondly, there are places where you/Lallyzippo are speaking and it doesn't specify extremely well that it's you because all it has it a portion of dialogue and nothing else.

Other than those too things, I really enjoyed it! Keep it up. :D

You reek of awesome.

That was the best humorous fanfic I have ever read, ever.

Interesting... not expecting that at all! Thanks for updating!

Happy Holidays,

Spirit of the Earth )

This was so funny! I almost died laughing. I especially loved the bit with the bullet flying through the plot hole. I laughed for 2 minutes straight after reading that!

omg that was FREAKING HILARIOUS!

Hades's only line perfect!

you need to update this. it's pure sue-bashing gold!

Ya...

I have to agree with Megara15 on that one

And plus not to sound rude or judgemental but this story doesn't make any sense to me at all!

Do u really need that much cussing! N O but, I say it sucks on ice! P