Poor Harry, he lived 10 years of his life to realise that none of it was real in the first place :( Interesting concept btw, i really enjoyed reading this :)

My review had nothing to do with Harrysmom. Honestly, I didn't know that you knew her. As for blasting her or your's... you need better friends... on your livejournal, I apologize. I saw your PM to me. I forgot who you were and went to your Profile. Saw your homepage, clicked on it (I get bored at work) and was surprised to see me mentioned. Was even more surprised to see Leighanne and Amy's response.

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Everything withstanding - my review was accurate. That's why I copied and paste your writing next to Edward Bulwer. If you can't see the similarities then you're blind.

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Oh and another thing what kind of crybaby goes crying to his "friends" when they get a negative review? You're an Engineer for God-sakes. Do you go off and cry when someone doesn't like your work?

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So go ahead and remove this review, but a REAL author leaves all reviews alone after someone reads their completed story. God knows it can help you on the review count.

Without a doubt the closest writing I've seen to Edward Bulwer-Lytton and the Paul Clifford novel.

When you find out whom this person is you'll realize how bad a writer you are. Let me give you a hint:

Edward Bulwer-Lytton:

"It was a dark and stormy night; the rain fell in torrents — except at occasional intervals, when it was checked by a violent gust of wind which swept up the streets (for it is in London that our scene lies), rattling along the housetops, and fiercely agitating the scanty flame of the lamps that struggled against the darkness."

Now your writing:

"Midsummer's Eve was thought by many to be one of the most magical days of the year, so what better day to hold a wedding? The sky had been blue, the sun bright, and the breeze pleasant. Once the sun had set, it seemed every star in the sky had come out, and a few new ones too."

wow THIS STORY IS AMAZING

I love stories like this though they're always so hard to find. ;D

You know, I read a similar story, only one (well, two if you count the one that isn't finished). Can't remember the name of it though, and the 'real' world didn't feature any magic. I like that yous does. Hm. Wonder if the ending will be anything like the others, though. In that one, Harry had decided to stay in the world with magic at the end of the story. Then, there was an epilogue where where the scene in the magic-less world has everyone sad and Harry catatonic. Ah, now that I think about there's actually 3 or 4 of these. They're not so easily written, I'd say. But you've done a marvelous job thus far.

First of all...this is the first Harry Potter fanfiction I have read that I could not stop reading. The premise was a very interesting one, and intrigued me from the beginning. The idea that Harry was only dreaming *either* of his realities is not a subject easily written without being unbelievable...but you managed it.

Before the "snapshots" chapter, a few things that I noticed...in the last chapter also...was that your transitions are very sharp and a bit confusing. The writing is also a little rushed in places, all of which takes away a bit from the story. I would have liked to see some more scene-setting, a bit of mood in the first seven chapters, in particular.

I thought that Draco's part in the story was...slightly contrived and awkward...and a bit rushed also. I think that the idea of him being there, and why, is workable, but very difficult to write. A little smoothing out there, though, I think would do wonders.

At first I thought chapter 8 was way too rushed, before putting together the "snap" comments and the chapter name, and understood. Once I knew that, I enjoyed the effect.

I thought that the brief part from Ginny's POV was very out of place...it was jarring to the reader, who has been seeing the entire story from Harry's POV...and I think it could have worked far better to manage it from Harry's POV there, also.

Two things struck me in particular about the story. One: you are very good with characterization. You go a bit beyond the paper-doll characterizations that most people use, and that made the canons so much more real. In particular I loved how you wrote for Dobby - that was just well done. The second thing was the sort of flash-scenes with Dobby trying to get Harry to wake up...very creepy, and very mysterious.

I really liked Dumbledore's explanations about fate and choice.

I don't really like romance at all...but you didn't make it the focus of the story, and wove it tastefully into the story...so kudos for that.

Overall, I loved the story. For a while, I didn't know what was real and what wasn't, either...no matter how perfect Harry's dream life was...I still thought that just maybe...it *was* real. I *wanted* it to be...I always wished Harry could be happy, too. But I was also happy with his decision to continue the fight. And Harry's future *is* possible...that he will have his own family someday and be happy.

Well done!

Nice story. Very well written and thought out, and the reactions of the characters are very believable. I particularly like the ending. Very believable take on the whole AU genre.