very well written story, read all chapters, honestly hoping there was more.. Your character development was detailed and well paced, stroy telling felt fresh but also true to the bleach form. Keep it up.

AWESOMENESS

I've read up to ch.8. It's a great story so far. The only thing I have a problem with is that you keep makeing so many grammar and spelling mistakes. Sometimes it even confuses me and makes me lose track of the story.

Can't wait for the next one!

Perhaps the flower scene was a little copied from the manga and anime. Might have been better to at least change the dialogue or some of the actions. And why didn't Ichigo know there was a hollow. Sure he could be retired, but he should still have his badge or kon.

Um, this is very interesting. I like how its building up. Update soon!