That was so sweet! :)

Aww, this is adorable.

You should use commas more often though. Sometimes I can't help but blinking every few seconds because the sentences are just so long it shorts out my brain and I have to start all over.

I see this problem in alot of your other stories. Not that mine are any better, but if you want to find a way to improve yours, the problem lies in the long sentences.

Anyways, yeah, cute. D

COMMAS.

D:

Otherwise it's good.

:]

That was really cute!