you're really quite brillieant you know

you should write more

~Al

I loved your story! I know that I am a bit late but have two comments for you:

1. I thought the section on building the castle was a little thin. The story of the great hall was excellent and left me waiting for more insights to why things were built the way that they are. Like the moving staircases, why do they move? I also am assuming that Rowena’s final bedroom is also the north tower classroom to prof trelawne. It makes sense that she would build a round room away from everyone so that none of the students are around during her visions. Adding these details will add to the love of the castle we all have!

2. I think that a great opportunity was lost by letting Ophelia die and not have her spirit become the first ghost of Hogwarts. Several things fall into place with her remaining in the story:

- her haunting the castle is a very good reason for Salazar to go mad and dream up the idea of the chamber of secrets – he can blame himself so he vows revenge on all mudbloods! Her presence is also a reason for him to fight with his friends and eventually leave the castle.

- she will be around to help Helga after the plague to keep hogwarts going before Rowena’s return.

- And the last thought is a idea for another fan-fic. See if her ghost is still at hogworts after centuries, eventually she will become bitter and angry, most likely it will be anger for the mud bloods. Ever wonder just how tom riddle knew he was the heir to slytherin? And all those stories about secrets in the castle are true? What if a mean old ghost in the castle (who happens to be able to recognize her own family members) told him of the power he could have? Now that could be a cool fan-fic. Too bad I don’t have to ability to write the story(and I’d need to seal about half or your story to make it work). :)

I loved your story. It was so lovely and sad. Keep writing!

WOW! I am completely and utterly amazed at this completely origional piece of work! Honestly, I have never read anything more believable concerning the Founders than this! I realize you wrote this forever and a day ago, but I just wanted to let you know that you have amazing talent! Please, never stop writing!

This was an excellent ficlet. I have never read a fiction with such intricate detail; I felt every emotion that Rowena felt, your fiction gives me a new light into the founders life's...especialy Rowens Ravenclaw's.

ChickoftheDarkMoon

Wow! This is... incredible, to say the least. How do you do it? You're an amazing writer. Please keep it up!

This such a sad story. But it was ver well written, and I'd enjoy reading it! Plz continue to write more fanfics!

wow, amazing story! so original from most fanfics! it was so sad at the end.

This was extremely good, though it hurt to read much of the time - well, I suppose that's part of the skill of it. The way you've woven the Founders and history, their loves and pain...

Amazing. Simply magnificent. A question though: was Genni a veela? Your physical description of her hinted that she was, but her personality did not seem like that of a veela. I especially liked the way you explained Slytherin's bitterness at muggle-born witches and wizards.

How lovely a story you wrote. I adored it- woah, you story gave me a weird accent thing. This is creepy. Anyway, I liked it.

Anna Moon, you freaxer. "Oh, they sux." Whatever. This ROX. I mean that totally sincerely. Now I'm bummed that I waited until the last minute to start reading, because I have to go to work now, and I just want to keep going. This is really really interesting. I haven't read a Founders fic before that really *feels* like there's history involved. It's also interesting to see a fic in first person, because you don't get a lot of those in the HP fandom. So let's see, details I particularly liked: The Gypsies - they added a whole lot of historical flavor and realism. The fact that there are no girls learning sorcery at the official schools in this era, or at least at *this* official school. And I love the idea of the village of Ravenwood. I can't wait to see how she chooses her name Ravenclaw. All right, I must go, but expect more from me soon. :-) Roxy.

The other review (for the next chapter) is actually for the wrong story. It fits though. I have a weird way of copying and pasteing a story, then reading it offline, and then reviewing by copying and pasting too. Here is this one's: Rich and beautiful writing. I love it.

Very sweet and sad and I like it.

That was great. That's all I can say. You should write a sequel or something, about a couple generations later. Wow. Great.