Awesome!

Well Bakura if you stopped tormenting him mentally and stop trying to kill Yugi and his friends to get his Millennium puzzle You might be lucky enough for Ryou to give you the smile you want from him.

Great fic:)

Aww :3 It's kind of bittersweet

Poor Bakura.

You know, I think this is the first story/poem/thing that portrays Ryou as unsymithetic.

This was very sweet. :)

Comet7

Aw! I loved it! . U did a great job! Poor 'kura! *sniffle*

Interesting. I think this would have made a better one-shot than a poem. Just like I mentioned in my review for "Fight On", it kinda lacks some of the elements that make a poem. You can't just chop something up into smaller lines and call it a poem. Honestly, I think you're an awesome writer, and this IS good for someone who hasn't written much poetry. But next time you write a poem, try to make it flow like a river meandering through the trees, and use literary devices to make it vivid as a conflagration of a sunset.

By the way, there's a simple way to divide your stanzas. Between each line, hold down "shift" while you press the enter key, so you get a single space. Then, between stanzas, just press the enter key, for a double space.

I hope my reviews are helpful and not discouraging! I do think you're an excellent writer.

wow, I really liked this. I could picture how he was feeling and i liked how it unravled. nice and cute 3

awh...*goes to hug Bakura* The poor guy..*sniffle*

I dont think this was bad at all, in fact you surprised me with the ending! Could you continue to wirte more poems? Plz and arigatou!

Hey he's not ur Ryou-kun, He's mine! LOL

nice poem tho not as good as the other one! it reminds me of when Kura has his funny "nice" mood swings!

KEEP ON WRITING! ur friend ROSE -x-

OOCness is a mystical word concerning to Bakura, I see. No seriously, I personally know that poem doesn't have to rhyme and all, and this was good, but do you think you can ever realize how big of a smile crept to my face when reading the phrase: "I love you Hikari" said by Bakura himself :) It's not a bad thing, just funny. Especially when his back IC saying right after that: " There. Now I've said it" :) I can almost hear him saying that...

With all friendliness

River

WOW! I really love this poem. How in the world can Bakura expect Ryou to forgive him and show him even on little smile if he doesn't stop hurting him.. Great Story...

Really angsty, but better then what I could ever write!

Must sumbit to community!

I don't really like yaoi fics, but this was good- but not one of your best. Well done all the same!

You were right. This was cute! Poor Bakura, though.