Oh this is awesome! :)

Wow. This totally sums up Ryou.

It was wonderful!

Once angain...AWESOME! this is so perfect. I can't believe some one would make something so perfect like this

A really nice piece of poetry. Well-written. Nice work. :)

Very insightful. Nice rhythem and tempo. You find yourself drawn into the emotions and troubles of Ryou. Wonderful.

Cool poem. I like the emotion in it, with the certain and uncertain moments, the hope and the despair... Very nicely done. I have a few concrits, though.

Firstly... The topic is a little wandering. There's no real sense of direction; it's all just a bunch of vague stanzas that are about the same thing. Try to group similar stanzas together. For instance, group together several stanzas that compare Ryou's light to Bakura's darkness. And then also group together stanzas about what he's fighting for, etc... Or something like that.

And it seems that you gave precedence to the rhyming more than to the actual poem. It kinda took over, leaving you so little room for a fat helping of metaphors and similes and alliteration and various other literary elements that truely make a poem.

But overall, I like the idea behind this poem, really. You're a great writer (I think you're just better at stories than peoms). :)

ok but a bit long for poetry

THAT SO BEAUTIFUL! *sobsob* its going into my C2, its just lovely! go BGA! *sniffel* these are tears of joy i promise!

ROSE (hiya ryou!)

Well in my case this takes more than two seconds... but I'll do it for your sake.

This brought back memories from the time I had my depressive mode on. First of all, those feelings and struggling to make it to the next day. Those words you wrote to be said to Ryou were the ones I wanted to hear. Thank you for letting me hear them now and here (short of...)

Secondly, when depressed, I wrote poems too. Not as good as this one of yours here. You can catch the verses I never could and transform feelings into words wich I was never able to. Good job with that. I'll go and read your other poem now.

Bye!

River

WOW! This is a beautifully written story and I love how you've described exactly how Ryou felt when he was confronted by Bakura and his fight to keep from being taken over by the darkness that is Bakura... Great Story... I'm adding this to my favorite list...

Once, again, GREAT! I guess I'll have to threaten to send to send people to the shadow realm when I write a fanfic!

I really love your way of writing poetry- great job! It describes really describes Ryou's feelings, and you are one of the few people who can actually rhyme and still make sense. I'm very impressed!

Jeez. Bakura sure likes to threaten...So yeah. I'll review.

That was cute. I really enjoyed it. _ Go Ryou! Fight! Oh, yeah. Another good job.