thats an interesting development...good story! keep it up!

I'm very dissappointed that I am the only person who's taking the time to review this story; I surely cannot be the only person reading it.

To the chapter, it was bleeping brilliant :-D, the whole atmosphere of the scene was set perfectly and you portrayed Samus/Drake wonderfully. The description was very detailed as always and I can't believe how much emotion you packed into this chapter. W.O.W

I look forward to reading more :)

You'll have to forgive me, I would've reviewed sooner except my internet royally screwed me over XD.

Anyway, about this chapter, interesting as it is, it is confusing in the sense that I'm not really sure where this is taking place in the timeline of the story. I'm assuming that this is a past experience, perhaps Drake's memories, if so, it would be best either to highlight that it is a past memory or to put the text in italics, as most readers would recognise italics as a past experience/memory.

Can't wait to read more nonetheless, keep up the good work, and thanks for that review of Thoughts of the Dark :)

Bloody brilliant, this story is simply amazing, carefully structured and written to perfection. I particularly enjoyed the fight in Chp 7, it was very detailed and well paced. A for Chp 8, well, what words can describe it, it's simply amazing.

Excellent work, I wonder if you have anything else in the works? :)

Chapter 3, a very interesting read. The description of the battle vs Kraid is spot on and once again the imagery and atmosphere are set to perfection. I don't think there is anything here to be criticized, an all round wonderful chapter :)

Brilliant first chapter, definitely a good, interesting read. The description and detail in all there, setting te scene and the appropriate atmosphere. My only gripe is the section which reverts to the past event of Drake's argument with his parents, it would have been better to put it in italics to show the change in scene. But what's done is done and the story is still great nonetheless.

Anyway, I'll be reading more of this *favourites* :)