Regardless that the story is very interesting I can't help but feel that something is missing. The emotions and level of detail on certain scenes is impeccable (to be fairly honest) but I can feel something in my bones that says to me that it lacks more trails (per se) that proves their love (or in Zelos' case lust) to their lover.
Something in my blood tells me that it lacks a sacrifice (matrimony in this case) that all the lovers/couples should go through to prove that their love is pure.
Something in my heart tells me that as in all stories there must be someone who will try to screw everything up...or end up killing everyone.
PS: may fortune smile upon you

I do have to say, I love this story greatly. I actually spent all night reading it, and I encountered few errors, errors that I undoubtedly would have made amongst many others. I thank you, not only for writing this story, but for taking the time and energy to make it an excellent one as well. A great many authours take the time to write a story, but cannot or will not improve it. As such, I thank you and Twilight Scribe from the deepest regions of my heart.

~Many years of copious and excellent writing to you

GreatAether96

I loved it, keep up ze good work

This was one of the best storys i've ever seen on this site, it was so romantic and funny at the same time, i hope to see work like this from you more often, you're an insperation.

wow. got no words to describe...

Nothin that hasn't already been said anyways

Great story

I really enjoyed reading this. Lloyd and Sheena didn't get together so quickly, but it didn't take so long either. That's a plus.

It also had Regal x Raine which I find interesting and more plausible than Kratos x Raine (Genis should not be Lloyd's uncle).

Probably one of the best things about this was the fact that there was no Zelos x Colette.

Excellent story! Can't think of any kind of constructive criticism, nor any mistakes can I point out either. But it was really good!

woot, it's done. nice story

and zelos goes back to being evil

and yet another awesome chapter. zelos starts showing his less-bastardlike-side.

oh shyit, epic! but what the hell, sheena just randomly knew where lloyd was? not complainin, this chapter is so amazin

zelos, you sly, evil bastard...

interesting concept, the holiday and all. lets see where it goes...on to the next chapter! I love Tos

I have to say first of all that I am truly impressed with this story. It had a great plot and moved along at a nice pace, not too fast or too slow. I was an English major in college and am currently writing what will hopefully be my first novel, so I know what to look for with grammar and such. I honestly can't remember finding anything wrong in the entire seven chapters. Very nice writing quality and style!

Of course, as I am a huge fan of Symphonia and especially the Lloyd and Sheena pairing, I may have a biased opinion here. Very nice. Keep writing!

Very nice chapter, didn't think Zelos was that much of an ass, I loved the reference to the Heimdall conversation, besides the one after he saves her from Mithos' control at Derris Kharlan that is the best conversation that they have, and the bed situation was very well written, I think you have both of their personalities down pat.