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Beautiful!

Very interesting and well-written

Awesome!

This was good, I think a lot of stories forget that the Pevensies must have been messed by the wars. You did a good job at showing that side of Peter.

This is such a small snippet, but it really grabs me somehow.

Wow. This is really good. Very nicely done.

I liked the ruggedness of the soldier and how their conversation played out. It felt very gritty, very real. And realistic too... not just moving along because it had to for the sake of the story, but because that's what it would do.

One comment is that I didn't get the context until the very end. I'm not sure why I assumed it was set during the conflict- I could almost see them in a trench even though that wouldn't make much sense- but I definitely didn't imagine they were at a street cafe and it read very differently once I knew that.

Sapphireswimming

Wow. Just wow. That was extremely awesome and I have never read anything like it. I wish I could write as good as you do. Wow.

*Adds to Favorites*

-~- Lady Sarah of Narnia

Excellent job! Even High Kings need help.

LOVED it! It was so simple, rather than some of the very "frilly" Peter-angsting-about-war stories. I loved the cranky American soldier, and though I don't have much experience I think you brought of the character of a WWII veteran very well. Wonderful job, I really enjoyed it.

i like it.

This is very good, aside from the language that your solider uses. (But I understand it is your character's type.) I like the connection of Narnia in this story.

In Aslan's Name,

Queen Susan the Gentle

A great story. Very good.

Oh, that was lovely. I especially liked the way you wrote in the veteran's manner of speaking in the narration, which works especially well since this piece is in first person. Really lovely.

-Vee

I really liked this a lot. It was simple, but very beautifully done. Great insights in both Peter and the American soldier. Sad, but so true. Great job!