Awww that was so cute! I loved it )

gale really made me mad but other then that good job

OMG! I LOVED IT! Eeeeeeeekkkkkkkk! SSSSOOOOOO CUTE!

I love the story; it was really cool how they got together like that and the birthday party was nice in the end! As for Gale, she's a nice character and all but I think that you should have developed her character more. She has no weaknesses and too much power, you know. And I think that you should have added a part where Luffy and Gale finally get along with each other very well and Gale clears up the misunderstanding by telling Luffy that it was her father who tore up the hat instead of her. After all, that is what Ace planned the party for, right? Because he didn't want to see his brother and one of his best friends act like that. So it would be better to have a chapter where they become best buddies again. Overall, I find Gale to be a good OC; she just needs... more.

Theirs a lot to hate about Gale, you've made her just about as Mary sue as possible. She ate a devils fruit, yet she has gloves with the sea stone stuff on them, she can walk on water, which pretty much Iliminates any weakness she should have had. plus you made her all knowing and seemingly more powerful then both Zoro and Luffy.

Your OC characters need a lot of things, the least of which is a weakness, believe it or not, a weekness is one of the most importent parts of a character.

Also you randomly made Sanji bi, you had no reason too, you didn't elaborate on it or anything. If you throw something like that in there, especially something like someone wearing a mask to hide themselves, you should have more about it, I'm not saying to make it a key point, but dont mention it twice then forget its existence, the same with the burns on Gale. Or the fact that she apparently broke her arm but forgot about it.

Over all it's not a bad story, The character development wasn't the best, but the plot was ok. As was the writing, although you should pay attention to you spelling a bit (I'm not one to talk) I noticed once you put weather )like rain) instead of whether (or not) don't ask me where though, I forget.

Theirs a lot to hate about Gale, you've made her just about as Mary sue as possible. She ate a devils fruit, yet she has gloves with the sea stone stuff on them, she can walk on water, which pretty much Iliminates any weakness she should have had. plus you made her all knowing and seemingly more powerful then both Zoro and Luffy.

Your OC characters need a lot of things, the least of which is a weakness, believe it or not, a weekness is one of the most importent parts of a character.

Also you randomly made Sanji bi, you had no reason too, you didn't elaborate on it or anything. If you throw something like that in there, especially something like someone wearing a mask to hide themselves, you should have more about it, I'm not saying to make it a key point, but dont mention it twice then forget its existence, the same with the burns on Gale. Or the fact that she apparently broke her arm but forgot about it.

Over all it's not a bad story, The character development wasn't the best, but the plot was ok. As was the writing, although you should pay attention to you spelling a bit (I'm not one to talk) I noticed once you put weather )like rain) instead of whether (or not) don't ask me where though, I forget.

I think that the reason why people didn't like Gale is because she was mean to Luffy and stole his hat. I didn't like her because she was interfering with Zoro and Luffy's relationship even if they did need a nudge in the right direction. She didn't to be so mean about the fact that she could easily steal Luffy's hat and did it in front of the crew no less. Gale pretty much made it look like Luffy was a weakling, when in reality he is pretty strong. Well, that is the impression I got of Gale anyway. The story was good despite that though. Keep up the good work.

I could see why someone could hate Gale, her overconfidence(whether a show or not) and the way she teases could be taken to be obnoxious and annoying. BUT personally I LIKE her -. I kinda wish you would have gone more into her development and why she betrayed Luffy/how(like you tell us it's her father that hurt him, but why would he at that point considering he's Garp's grandson and wasn't a pirate at that point? if they were nakama how could she even dream of doing something like that?) and maybe what luffy thinks of her now after all her help, type thing

You know, I've never blushed alot... but Aww, I blushed up to my ears as it was so darn cute! :3

And I liked Gale, but maybe you made her too overpowered all knowing, no? (Or then I just can't comprehend that someone might be better than any of the straw hat crew. T_T) Anyway, loved it. 3 :3

I liked Gale... so I don't know what everyone elses deal was with her, but I had no issues. Nice job! This is the first Luffy/Zoro I've read and its rather good. Nice grammar, complete sentences you know, all that jazz. Good stuff.

Wow this was an absolutly wonderful story. I really don't know what else to say about it except Gale was well writen and gracefully brought in, fitting well. Good job.

love this story wish i was this good a writer

and zoro's right

bitch needs to die

well i didn't see that coming

ah i get it now Gale is a yaoi fabgirl

ow i what your doing your evil poor luffy