Very well done. I loved your portrayal of both Mello and Near in this fic. Mello is so perfectly and in-characteristically self destructive and half mad, and Near is just so, well, Near. Even Matt is wonderfully done. Faved.

I like it. A lot. I think you got into Near's head very well.

Wow. Wonderful oneshot, it was amazing and i loved it.

Very nice. I loved it!

The ending was just incrediable, especially the part were you find out what Mello whispered in Near's ear all this years ago. It just seemed so cute. Plus the chocolate part was perfect too.

Aww. Loved it. Thank you! :D :D

uathann :D

This story is incredibly well written, it's awesome. I loved every bit of it, it's very emotional and well thought.

You are a birlliant writter, please keep up the good work!

i just hope it didn't cost you your finals -"

hey nova! Love the story. you really got near and mello right, and I love how matt is there, hovering in the background. The chocolate part was dead on, just like the rest of the end. I really wish you'd sent this to me to beta. You missed a couple things, if you don't mind me pointing them out. they don't detract from the story, but here goes anyway:

I think 'desperate' would work better than desperately in the first sentence.

The first parenthetical statement would sound better, I think, with the percent inserted, rather than implied.

Immediately after that, I think it should be 'shown', as opposed to 'show'. It is written in past tense after all.

I don't understand the puddle thing in the third paragraph. The 'and' throws me off.

I think it should be 'really TAKEN the time to learn how to stay alive'.

The ending is chocolate with a liquid crack center served by a scentily clad masseusse who wants me naked and on any available flat surface.

I really got pulled into Near's head while reading this. Very well done, for a one-shot. Loved it.