Continue. This time in Sasuke's POV please.

Real cute should continue it.

it sounds alright. and did i actually read right about sakura KISSING Sasuke cause I hate that biatch

i luv this chap! pls do continue...btw. i luv how u managed to relate naruto/ino/ and deidara...and what sakura did is just way too gross,(sigh) perfect example as to why sasuke belongs to naruto

Continue? It's cute! I love it. I love stories like this, I love how you write. Just because I haven't said enough I'll add, this looks like it'll be just the kind of story I love to read. YAY!

hey

intresting story it seems like it can be quite a good story

please continue it as i want to know more

no offense, but i could not really understand this story that much.. it is interesting. You also need a beta...badly,. i saw so much grammatical errors. i will become your beta if you want me to?...if you want, but the story is interesting, jus needs help with grammar and spelling.

YATTA! continue please! if u want to that is... but either way, yay! thank u for bringing me out of my yaoi deprived state D

Ok, I was just grossed out by having the pink-thing's tong down Sasuke's throat. Poor Naruto. I hope that she is gotten rid of soon. Nice first chapter.

The idea is interesting, but you're gonna have to work a little harder.

Your tenses are all messed up.

Words and sentences are either incompleted, mispelled, missing, or in the wrong tense, making it sound like a two year old speaking.

It's spelled 'breathe' with an 'e' at the end.

Try and seperate the dialouge a little more.

So, either find a Beta or improve it yourself. The story isn't good the way it is.

awesome! it would be nice if you would continued it

yeah you should continue it is a good story with a nice plot

whoah, Deidara and Ino related so directly to Naruto? Its surprising. I could believe they were related to one another though, heh.

i think I will look foreward to an update. _