Interestting story idea. Yeah I hate the 1st person too. Also you've added section dividers. Hate the 0000000000000000000000000000000000000000000. Stupid. Real books use a single hash #. Using Mobile fanfiction app text to speech feature. Your divide makes phone say zero a hundred times like a banshee. Hate attempts to pretty it up with nonsensical constructs. Keep writing but don't rush the story to fast. You're not bad.

It's been over a YEAR AND A HALF since this was updated. Are you ever going to continue it? We've been pretty patient.

It feels as though you are honestly rushing your story. You aren't giving much details to the story. For example, what does Keitaro's suit look like? I'm confused by the chest plate and the suit. Are they two different things or one in the same? Dialog leaves something to be desired as well. By that I mean in your earlier chapters, the dialog is too short while you are focusing more on getting Keitaro to become Iron Man.

Pretty good story so far... Hope ya can update soon!

Well you just killed any chance of me reading the rest of this story. Thanks for putting the image of Shinobu raped in my mind. God dammit I can't stand writers like you.

This story has me... intrigued. The idea that Su is capable of creating Starktech is not so far-fetched, unfortunately, the thought of Urashima having that power frightens me slightly. I look forward to seeing how he uses such terrible and great power, with just a hint of trepidation.

This story is heart-breaking, interesting, original, touching, and unique.

When are you ever going to update this story? It's almost a YEAR since the last update and you left off at a cliffhanger!

Motoko sent him flying.

Great story! Update soon!

I wanted to know if you are going to contiue the story

Liked the chapter until I got to the portion about shinobu's supposed rape (I don't like the thought of them having been remotely successful).

Almost completely forgot about this story until I was browsing the Love Hina section and saw that it had been updated, in fact i still don't quite remember why keitaro would be in Kyoto, but since he's there it's something dealing with motoko.

are you going to have suu try to suit up herself and try to help him or is she just the maker/tinkerer?

Man I was waiting for an update for so long, good so far, keep it up

well that explains why this chapter was so dark.

I have lost my self grandparents only granpops left.

But i know 1 thing if i were all the time sad becose the passed away they would be mad at me and scold me definetly so i try to live positive life as much as i can sometimes the mood gets REALLY down but i try to keep myself smiling and think of all the good times we had together.

dont lose the good time you had over things you cant change.

I take it this is abandoned