I always love your writings. I feel like you write the characters very well.

Glad to see more of this! Careful with those beers, Gordo.

"Andie screams and jumps onto me hugging me over the shoulders and wrapping her legs around my waist." My goodness, she's affectionate! I like your use of "dismount" to describe Andie getting off of him; it implies something to do with gymnastics.

Our Gordo's all witty under the influence! Would he go so far as to offer to watch a girl's friends change into bikinis? That seems pretty bold.

I like it that he decides to talk about his confusion over Lizzie. I hope Andie's worthy of his trust.

I'm glad I have this on alert as it's nice to see you're still writing this story. I'm really enjoying your approach with Gordo and how he seems conflicted about the different things in his life. Hopefully the next chapter won't take months, but as long as you keep going it's worth the wait.

Ooh, back story. Exciting. More more!

I loved the story so far. You seem to have captured Gordo's character very well.

I enjoyed reading all the chapters so far and I enjoy reading about Gordo's feelings about Miranda and Andie.

I know this is longshot but I thought I'd give it a try. Could you please update? :)

Nice work though. :)

Good chapter, nice stuff. I liked the way you wove together all the bits. The bit about Miranda biting her lip when she likes a guy...a small detail that made a big impact. As I say: nice!

My only concern, and it may be a prejudice on my part, but I have a hard time imagining Gordo doing any kind of sports. But at least you didn't have him playing football! That would have been just too over the top.

Keep going, please!

christy

Glad to see an update, I dig this story. The suspense is growing. I enjoyed all the MG in this chapter.

So I see I'm not the only one to get the sudden urge to throw it back to Lizzie McGuire fiction. I like this, it's a fun idea. Tudgeman drinking Capri Sun... is pretty much adorable.

You've created an interesting world with some realistic dialog (tho I have to agree with your reviewer who could not see ALL the characters you mention being such close friends-yeah, it does seem a little stilted.) But the Gordo/Andie relationship is ringing so true and right, I hope you plan to move it along. Please write more! BGM

And PS: did I miss something? What is the "oz" a reference to? Or will that be revealed?

I'm still liking this story, tho I'm having a hard time believing that Kate and Ethan are in the same social circle as Tudge and Veruca. I feel like you're trying to get everyone into the story, regardless of whether or not the relationships make sense.

On the plus side, the dialog between Gordo and Tudge is very realistic, I can really see them saying those things.

One question, tho: when you say Ethan and Kate are off somewhere "necking," which decade's definition of the word are you using? It boggles the imagination.

I'm guessing we're setting up for an Andie/Miranda conflict, hm? This should be interesting...

christy

"To be continued..." I'm glad to hear that.

When Gordo was about to knock on the door and Andie opened it, it took me a second pass at that paragraph to be clear on what happened (it is hard to describe). He'd started the motion toward the door with his fist and couldn't stop, so his momentum carried him forward, and Andie had to catch him or he'd fall down. Have I got it, pretty much?

* “I don’t get that question as much as you would think these days,” I smile, “she and I are friends…” *

I hear a full sentence ending with "you would think these days," which leads me to think this should be:

* “I don’t get that question as much as you would think these days,” I smile. “She and I are friends…” *

Or, if he stops talking and then smiles, there could be a period/full stop after "days." This is a detailed point, I realize.

In * “Wow…um…” more stuttering…just say goodbye again and leave her be moron. * I'd say a comma is required ("leave her be, moron").

I noticed she calls him David after he comes back for his keys. She hasn't done that in this story before.

I have a feeling Gordo's next communication with Miranda is going to be very interesting!

I really like your version of Gordo, and I have to admit that It think your version is one of the best out there. Defiantly an interesting end to the evening. I am confused about one minor point, why is Lizzie in Hollywood? Maybe you explained it earlier and I missed it.

Another thing, I like how Gordo is taking more than a passing interest in other girls beside Lizzie, Miranda taking a more prominent role in his fantasies. I find it irritating when authors put blinders on Gordo and his sole focus is on Lizzie.

Can't wait to see Chapter 3.

I had no idea that "Andrea R." would be Andie. I wonder who "Andrea S." is? Gordo and Andie are believable older versions of their TV selves, and I like the first person voice of Gordo. I also appreciate your use of standard English spelling and punctuation (you don't have "LOL" in dialogue, thank heavens). What's this about owing Miranda dinner? You're off to a good start.

Hey! Welcome back to LM FF! A much needed shot in the arm for this section. And this was so much fun to read. I almost forgot how much I like your stuff.

Nice work putting Gordo and Andie back together again. Don't know if I've ever seen that done. This could go places. Please write more!

Christy

You're writing Lizzie again! Wow! I'm glad. ) Not sure how I feel about this because I wasn't particularly fond of Andie the first time around, but I have faith in your writing.