nice. think the ending could be a little stronger somehow, but that is probably because the rest is really good.

I must say I love this story. It has its own style to it and a original plot to it. I think you explained everything wonderfully. I was hoping to see a little of what Kell did during her time with Maggur. I also have no idea where Griffenspeak is. I can continue to sing praises to this story, I love it so much. I hope that you could maybe do a squeal?

Anyways it was great and I loved it alot, if you would like to respond my account, which I don't feel like loving in to is Allysmurfy. If you need any help with story ideas, or if you want to continue this then just give me a howler.

~Ally

Wow... Just wow.

This was quite unexpected.

But very well written, and very enjoyable.

Wow! That was so dramatic!

Even though I anticipated that it was Kel, it was still epic when the turth was finally revealed.

The codename you chose was really cool, Gideon. Kel really is a mighty warrior, ey? ;)

that was really good

Love it, it was hard to read as Kel was suffering at the hands of Maggur,

But it was worth it!

Wow, great story!

Completely not what I was expecting, very interesting.

I loved it, Thanks.

This was an extremely original and interesting piece - it was full of suspense and twists that I didn't see coming at all. Some of it was a bit confusing at times and you spelled Kel's name wrong, but I'm too wrapped up in this to care. You have done a wonderful job with this!

AWESOME STORY! Though you didn't end it there did you? O.O What happens next? o.o

I really like the way this story was written. Keep on writing.

xxYanniXX

PS I loved the ending.

I absolutely loved this story!

Sarah

I absolutely love this story. Especially how Kel handled everything after killing Maggur.

Wonderfully written! I enjoyed reading this piece very much! :D

REALLY NICE! Are you going to continue?

Brilliant. I loved the plot. So many people shy away from the truly angsty pieces, but you did a wonderful job with it. Very, very nice. Definitely keep writing. My only complaint is that there were a fair number of grammatical mistakes, but not enough that they detracted from the plot line. :) Keep it up!