Hey! So it's like, 2017, and I must have read this like, two or three years ago, but I was looking through my first ever fanfic account and found this old jem.

So originally on this chapter, you had a sentence that was long the lines of "There was a wave of the hand, 'you know', he said, 'your virginity." I think it's been changed, but that line fucked me up so bad. I must have spent half an hour cry-laughing over it, and got my sibling to read this so we could be on that same wavelength.

And it's become an enormous inside joke between me and my sibling for like, years. And we're always talking about how sensational this fic is, and how that line just trips us The Fuck up.

So thanks, for writing this gem and making a sustainable part of my current humour run along "there was a wave of the hand", and how that makes us die every time. Thanks a ton.

So I feel like I should let you know that like, this fic's the best. God, you might not even see this, since I know I deserted my old email, but I figured I need to pass on the love, you know?

Gosh, I really like this. Sad to see that it hasn't been updated for almost two years.

What?! That's all? Please-I beg of you-write more! I'd like to know what happens!
Apart from my pleading, very well written story! You use of words sounds very professional.
Keep up the good work!

Would love to see more of this. The question is: Will I?

PLEASE UPDATE. Lord knows I know how hard it can be to update; I also write fanfics, so I know it can just be literally the worst thing ever to try and write another chapter. However, you are a fantastic writer, and I am absolutely in love with this story. I would very much love an update soon, considering it's been two years, but I suppose I understand if you just don't feel like continuing writing this. I'll be very sad, but I'd understand. Much love. xx

More please

WTF! you've waited a damn year! Shit! this is sooooooooooooooooo irritating

I can count on one hand the number of times I have ventured into the SSBM side of fanfiction, I think it was... twice, this being my third or maybe my second time. Ike is definitely an interesting choice for Zelda here - and it's even more interesting that you decided to start it off with her still in a relationship with Link. It's unfortunate though that you have to create some kind of circumstance to separate the two (I may or may not have a slight fondness for these two); Link's faltering in the last chapter was definitely disconcerting. (I like how you made him a social activist for all things green and nature - haha - not surprising, given the environment he has grown up in.)

Zelda's characterization I'm a bit on the fence about. On the one hand, she's definitely not the Zelda we are used to... in other words: business-like, calm, regal, and cold even. But I guess that would make it slightly harder for anyone to fit that kind of personality with an equally reserved man. But the combination is definitely possible and interesting to create otherwise. Anyways, moving on, this Zelda here is obviously still in her developing stages... perhaps, she has not quite reached that cynical level of worldly weariness yet? After all, Link has been the one to do her bidding time and again. Here, she is insecure, easily ruffled, and it seems her noble front is just that, a front - whereas in the original LoZ series at least, it seems as if she has been born with that regal quality and is quite self-assured because she well has to be. Which is fine if you want to take the route you are taking now since this story seems to line more on a lighthearted, comedic path (although this chapter definitely changed that atmosphere). I understand that you're trying to humanize her and also trying to create a situation where she can develop (and have a reason to interact w/ Ike in the first place), hence the insecurities and such. But the whole time, I have to keep justifying some of her actions as perhaps what a younger Zelda may enact. So acknowledging all of that, it is hard for me to actually give constructive criticism on her characterization in this story since it was your authorial intent to make her this way for this kind of plot.

As for Ike, I am curious to see how he has become so emotionally invested in Zelda after just that one day they have first met (assuming that was the first time he's met her since you are narrating mainly from Zelda's POV). His personality kind of deters that line of attachment and if he were to ever get attached, it would take a heck of a long time and a lot of exposure to that individual. I am not saying that you're making it out to be that he is already in love with her or something like that but in the chapter where you gave us Peach's side of the story - how you revealed that he rarely came to see the matches but when it was announced that it was Zelda's turn, he decided to show up. And when she got pummeled by Browser, he was clearly agitated. The magnitude of his insistence on helping her (when he demanded Peach to tell him how to sneak into the training room) was even more startling. And that was just the day, or a few days, after they have first met (again, assuming he hasn't been watching her before that) so by that time I am already thinking, how can he be so interested in her as a person (if not a slight lady-crush) already? And in this chapter, it's almost like he was jealous during her and Link's embrace - presuming that it was jealousy. I bring all of this up because as of right now, I'm finding it hardly plausible for him to be interested in Zelda in that kind of light presently. It's the matter of the short time they have barely interacted with each other (besides the occasional verbal assault and training) that concerns me since that is not enough to create a convincing foundation for -those- kind of feelings, especially for a person like Ike. Perhaps you will reveal his side of the story later but I am just giving you feedback based on what you have revealed so far.

Hopefully my critique doesn't come off as harsh but the least a reader can do is to give honest feedback for writers who obviously take the time and effort to refine their writing. You don't have to respond back of course but if you want, you can email me at Unisawr aim . com . Otherwise, you do not have to waste a whole author's note page on a reply.

I love this oh so so so soooo much. I understand the struggle to post/be active cause I'm a RPer on Twitter. n_n But I would absolutely love an update soon because this fanfic. Is. Amazing. And cliffhanger! What?! I need moooore. ** Thank you and can't wait to see Chap. 6!

This is possibly the best -written SSBB fanfic on here. Honestly, well done. I look forward to the next update(:

By the way, I'm OceaneSkye who reviewed this like 4 years ago. (I just reread my old reviews...*cringes* so glad I got out of that Nya-phase.)

I was 13 then...see how much I love this fic? XD But I do understand the hiatus, though. Life sucks. So don't feel guilt-tripped into continuing it or anything. (Though you really should *slowly lifts gun to head*) It's also really interesting how your writing style has changed a little. Sort of John Green-esque. :D

OH MY FRICK. I AM SO INEXPLICABLY ECSTATICALLY HAPPY THAT YOU'RE ALIVE! I'VE WAITED SO MANY YEARS FOR MY FAVORITE FANFIC EVER TO UPDATE! THANK YOU SO SO SO MUCH I LOVE YOU. 8D 3333

Okay now that the fangirling is out of the way, I really like the revisions you made on the other chapters. It really added more of a conflict as to Zelda's need to improve, and it solidified the plot, I think. Also, so many italics. Squeeee c:

As for the new chapter, OMG. CLIFFHANGER, REALLY? XD I love Lucario and Zelda's little banter about Ike. Classic. And did Ike actually get jealous when Link hugged her?! Why is Link so sketchy? What is he up to? 0_o And WHAT HAPPENED TO PIT PLEASE DON'T TELL ME HE'S DEAD AHHHHHHhhhhh

So yeah. Just a little note that your work is extremely loved and appreciated. :3

Ellx

This is a nice take on the whole idea of the world of Super Smash Bros., and I think you did this well. :)
I love Marth and Peach's personalities in here. Even though it's OOC, but I honestly think that they're hilarious. XD

And of course, our beloved Radiant Hero, Ike! I hope that we'll get to see more of him soon.

Keep up the good work! :D I hope you're planning to add other newly-revealed characters in the roster of the new SSB4.

As per your stated request, here follows the review by Aliens of Doom of the story entitled The Flames.

SQUEEE!
I like it. I really, really like it. Standouts so far for me are Zelda's narration (I think that telling the tale from her point of view was a really good decision), and the triad relationship between her, Link and Ike (though I do hope we could see some more Ike/Link interactions).
I'm also enjoying the slow build towards the eventual Zelda/Ike resolution, since I know it's coming it's nice to be able to pick up the hints and leanings towards that.

I terms of things I'd like to see improved... hmm... we've had a fairly small cast so far which for a series with as many characters as Smash has seems to be a slight waste to me. With Marth and Lucario being introduced though I'm hopeful that things will improve on this front. And hmmm... I guess that's the only thing that I can think of right now.

Uppddaaaaate!