Interesting, but a bit off book. Have you ever read the books? Because if you have, you most likely would not have made these mistakes.

Luscious Molfoy - His name is Lucius Malfoy

Avada Kavada - The correct incantation is Avada Kedavra

death eater - This is a title, so it is capitalized: Death Eater

Voldermort - His name is Voldemort.

Good idea, however!

That was...odd, but good...in an odd way,still good job!

aww, that was so sweet, very nicely done

Poor Harry must have been desperteand would have had to have lost everyone, but i suppose anyone would do it...