so good~

Ukitake was a little out-of-character... o.o I LIKED that :D MUAHAHAHAHAHA
No, but seriously this was awesome

I think the story was written really well. It was funny and naughty and enticing all at the same time. I like the contrast of their pairing, most ppl dont do it as well as you, so I just wanted to say - YAY YOU! It would be really nice if you wrote more related to this story, or at least this pairing...its just that you do them so well while making them slightly different, but not out of character - its believable and thats why I thought it was good. Hope this is a helpful review- Im new to this.

I loved the way you ended it! Poor Byakuya... he had it comming though... I will admit I had my doubts seeing as this is aparently what my friend calls 'payback' for a ByakuyaxIchigo lemon (please note that I do not ship this pairing under any circumstances) and since I only recieved the url taking me to the story, I originally thought the pairing would be something seriously obscene, like MayurixToushiro, or something like that. Obviously reading this proved me wrong (thank god) because even though I am not easily scarred, it probably would have taken me a good 5 minutes to get over that pairing.

It was a really good story, including two of my favorite Bleach characters, which made it that much better. :D

~hatorimalfoy3~

There is probably an entire psychology waiting to be written on why we love to discomfort Byakuya Kuchiki. Done very nicely here, with a good twist at the end.

Oh, I love this pairing and this story. xD I wasn't expecting that ending, very nice twist of events. And so random, which is brilliant. Kido bondage, how unique. xD

Nice ending.

That was hilarrious.

I loved it. This pairing needs MUCH more love...

LOL That was fantastic. This is probably one of my fave pairs, you did a great job. :3

Poor Byakuya...and Ukitake having so much fun as usual xD

Heheh I loved it!

too funny ! I loved that one !

I love random yaoi fics,

okay what I mainly see is good about this is you accomplish a great deal of the story telling through dialouge, which is necessary for both humour and romance, but what is especially important with romance fics is that there is adequete description through other means.

I won't lie, this is a punchline story. The "damn it all" at the end just made my evening. But it doesn't read like a punchline story. You can see it in some of the short stories of Issac Asimov that he gears the whole story towards a punchline at the end. But yours doesn't do that, which is good. The way to tell if you've 'punchlined' your story is see if it still makes sense if you take away that punchline.

I like your yaoi writing, I can't remember if I ever did any, probably should, anyway I'd like to see more like this, it's become clear in the manga now that Byakuya was not Ukitake's fukutaicho, but what the hell.

keep writing, I'll think of a solid request soon.

-JeanThine

cute

aw poor byukashi being left high and dry like that

XD, poor Byakuya. But this was entirely too much fun to read. I'm very glad yours was the first UkitakeByakuya I read, as I'm afraid others won't be so...well, good, to put it bluntly. Though Ukitake pouting was kind of...o.o. XD, but I still liked it very much.

Poor Byakuya. Evil, sexy Ukitake. I want one.

I also want that kido spell...just in case I get a ByaKUYA anytime soon...

Judi