Lol update

i like this story its not half bad i always felt if some one else had trained Naruto earlier Naruto would be stronger at a younger age

Funny, nice writing :)

Good story, but have you abandoned it?

What WOULD happen if you set a tic-tac on fire? THat's what I wanna know, LOL. Interesting story. Kurenai/Naruto has to be the bizarrest pairing ever... but I shall press on.

i've never actually liked naruto with OC's until i read this story . thanks for enlightening me to this.

plot was rushed here

if you didn't want to dedicate time to a mission...you could have skipped it.

The dialog felt forced here as well. Not nearly as good as what we got in the first two chapters.

Felt farcical.

I think that you should put more detail into the story.

Might I explain?

We don't know what age Naruto has in this story. The enemy ninja, too cocky and they shout out their plans, and that's something a ninja shouldn't do. The fights, they're too short. The characters are also majorly ooc. And finally, asking for a certain number of reviews is just childish and inmature, just because a story has a lot of reviews, doesn't mean is good.

Don't take this as a flame, take it as constructive criticism.

Please update soon!

I like the story, through it has some mistakes.

The red chakra can't reach nine tails, otherwise, the Kyuubi would take over Naruto. When Naruto reaches four tails, his skin separates from his body and he actually looks like the nine tailed fox, and actually acts like the nine tailed fox, only that he has four tails, not nine. (He attacked Sakura in Shippuden while in this state) If that happens when he has only four tails, imagine the destruction he could bring when he reaches nine tails.

Anyways, it's good, but you might want to look out for that in future chapters.

hey great chapter made me laugh i can't wait for the next chapter so can you email me when it is you ok thanks again for the chapter

Hey,

You definitly have a good story going with how Naruto hooked up with this Kuri chick. But, there is one thing your missing in your story. You are completely leaving the original outline out of the story. There is no structure to your writing. When did this take place, after Tsunade was brought back, or when Naruto comes back from his training with Jiraiya. I hope you take this into consideration and not as a flame. Call it constructive criticism. Start writing what happens with missions and where the story line will go. We, the readers have no idea where in the Naruto timeline this is. It's always good to know what is going to happen. I enjoy differences in a story but they get boring is they are completel AU. Show us something from the real timeline, or make up your own version. IT will get you alot more reviews.

Bonketsu No Banryuu

The Final Dragon

P.s~ Your doing a great job but just throw in more adventure, fighting, and the latter.

Good story i kind of like the idea of Naruto and Kurenai pairings and Kuri seems like a nice character i am looking forward to were this is going update soon..

I'd have to rate this chapter as a "...meh..." chapter, somewhat short and rushed. h well, still kinda curious on where this will go

LOL, nice negotiation technique.

I hope Kuri remains loyal to Naruto and not go to Sasuke or anyone...(raises fist)