This story Rox! My favorite line was: Their nickname was “oni-hana” for demon flower. That is an awesome nickname! I really liked your Story! Keep writin!

it was nice, i liked those comfort zones you put in. original, most normally put the hokage heads and such but i liked it. anyway the areas you need to improve on is your language. mine may not be the best but you need to read through your story a few times, it may be boring but hell. you can also get those Beta Readers to help you out. it'll be better to get your mistakes corrected in the begining. for eg you started of with the present tense, but then later you went into past. you keep juggleing between the tenses, which is not a very good thing to do. so yeah. hope you take it well coz the story was really good.

This is quite a nice Story.

I really liked the idea and the riddle.

But there are afew mistakes here and there.

I liked the fact that you actually drew out the similarities between Naruto and Ino.

It was meant to ve touching right?

I think it worked pretty well.

XD

super awesome you kept Naruto and Ino in character and it was pretty realistic I especially like Ino's thoughts on the Sasuke situation

hey!

your fanfic is great! D

still.. would you mind if I trained on your fanfic? I want to train for beta reader D

thank you