Chapter 20
You aren't going to forget!"
[Is this an order or question? If the latter, it’s missing the mark]

"That's alright
[all right]

RYOGA!" A blood curdling yell of shear outrage
[I imagine this is Akane, but having her name to clarify would’ve been nice]

Did you get a look at either of them?"
[Ranma might not be an expert observer, but should’ve gotten some information about build and gait]

I know some others have complained that this doesn't "feel" as much like a Ranma 1/2 fic, but crossovers always tend to incline towards one or the other fandom in tone or the way the plot is handled and this is firmly rooted on the Ranma characters so I don't think there's anything wrong with it. The fact that it's expanding into the toxic relationships and mistakes a lot of the characters have is actually interesting, because the manga did a disservice by playing Status Quo Is God (probably for sales) rather than letting things evolve naturally. I look forward to seeing what kind of questions and clashes come up next.

Question: isn’t there an anime that already has the lovenotes. It has the immortal yandere a immortal Victim an immortal female shikigami and the immortal sister of the yandere thats also a yandere targeting her yandere sister who’s targeting a unlucky victim that was saved by the shikigami which is also the gods daughter which is all to happy to give his daughter away. Or that’s what i got so far.

Mariko Konjo is the Love Note user. The whole cheerleading bit gives it away, since there’s only one person in Ranma 1/2 that practices “Cheerleading Martial Arts”. Heck, just look up “Ranma 1/2 Cheerleader” and you can easily find her page on the wiki.

Anyways, I’ve been enjoying the story so far! You’ve done a really good job at combining the Death Note intrigue with Ranma 1/2’s general chaos.

Good job!

Cool chapters

Nabiki had best hope her house wasn't bugged while the family was out.

Wow, for a while I was afraid that this fic was dead. I'm glad to see that it is not. This coronavirus crisis has let to the resjrrection of several fanfics. And i notice that you are preparing for a climax soon, i hope that your inspiration doesn't ran out. And be safe.

Kasumi wrote enough names in microscopic calligraphy that is more easily expressed as an amount in scientific notation?

... I pity L in advance.

Great idea by the way

Not much Ranma in this fic. I don't mean just Ranma the character. I mean the whole flavor of Ranma the series. I stopped reading partway in this chapter. It's not bad writing as such, but it's not Ranma and not really fun, exciting or anything.

This is a great crossover

Update please

Chapter 18
hearing it's origin
[its]

for the others."
[Invitations should still have a question mark]

Cupid wants to hid
[hide]

situation is spirally out
[spiraling]

have any idea-"
[Even interrupted, questions need their mark]

Pretty good as far as character, plot flow, and there's more character conflict/interaction so I like it.

Thanks heaps for this update!

Again nice to read good Ranma fanfic!

How... How did you make such a silly premise like love note work as good as the original death note?! How?!

Really enjoying this story, Thanks for Writing!