I'm pretty sure Merde means shit... does Ekeln mean the same thing?

OHMYGOSH! are you kidding me? LAMERDE? hahahahahahahahaha! it's like, oh shit! hahahahaha nice wording! u

THIS FIC is ADORABLE! i love it, and its cute, well detailed and a nice thing to read! please keep going

... La Merde? XD I hope the brand-name isn't a literal translation. It's like, "Hm. This gel smells kinds funny. Weird brown color, too." LOL!

The part at the end of the note in Chapter One made me laugh. Poor Polly!

Cheers,

~Truffles

The translation for La Merde sent my head painfully back in laughter.

I love it.

Awesome Chapter! as always... right?

Dude, sorry for the rush onn the last review heh..heh..

So already summertime? or not?

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Hm, I like how stable the plot line is, but a part of me wishes there was a bit of meat to it. How slice-of-life it is reminds me a bit of this little show named ARIA. I mean, it's good no matter what you do, but it doesn't hold the greatest bit of interest. It's just fluffy and sweet all the way. Kind of like vanilla ice-cream- the taste never changes no matter what you do to it.

It's that kind of stability that you have a way of portraying, from one perspective though. On another perspective, it reminds me of myself when I was younger, and being as "irresponsible" as Trucy and Apollo. It feels like they're younger than 13 in the story. I'm kind of ready to hunt down Phoenix and demand why he'd dare to leave Trucy and Apollo alone! Besides, wouldn't Apollo have food in his own apartment? So wouldn't that help them save a bit of money?

Nevertheless, the story is still interesting. I just wish it would get a bit more interesting, you know. But no worries; I'm sure you have something big awaiting in the future chapters.

Oh, another note, I'm not fond of those descriptions where you describe what someone does to cook or something like that. I just thought you could make it a bit more creative.

This is very cute. you capture the brother/sister relationship between Polly and Trucy very well. I did think Phoenix was a little OCC, but I like the way you write the siblings. Keep writing!

I know the first translates to "The S**t", but I know no German.

Your math is a little off. 7*15 is 105! Apollo is LOSING money by taking this job.

Awesome Chap. like always! :D Sorry for the rush if you have any crappy homework to do then just maybe updated this fic after your exams,crappy homework,spring break

No rush! :D

P.S. Don stress yourself:)

Enjoy the Spring Break!

I think this is quite cute so far and well-written. I do think that Phoenix came off a little out of character in this second chapter though. I think he might take advantage of Apollo a bit (although not quite as badly as he seems to be doing here), but I don't see him as being as uncaring as he comes off here and I don't see him abandoning Trucy at a moments notice without even telling her. Even in the game when Trucy wasn't sure what he was up to, she knew he was busy with his "secret mission," so she vaguely knew what was going on and what to expect. They seem like a loving and close family. Phoenix may not always be the most responsible father and mentor, but he certainly cares about both of them and wouldn't be so dismissive of either of them. That said, the story is interesting and the first chapter is particularly well done.

Oh, another great instalment by you. At first, in the beginning, with Apollo all dreading work and everything, I thought you didn't have his personality down. But boy was I proved wrong. Everything was done so well! The chapter was a lot better than the last because there was just a bit more meat to it. Phoenix leaving the office for a week was an excellent addition (I always wondered why in the game, if Phoenix was so good at poker, why didn't he ever enter the professional leagues? But glad you filled in that little plot hole). The money part was also funny. Nick, you little cheapskate you!

But I found it very odd that Phoenix wouldn't tell Trucy anything. I mean, at the very least, he would've left her a note of some sort. And Trucy, I thought she would be a bit mad at first, but then think that if it was for the benefit of the agency, then she wouldn't mind, after all, she is CEO. As well, why would the agency be closed? I mean, it is Trucy who is boss, not Phoenix. Phoenix works under her in work.

But other than that, I thought it was a very humorous piece. I love Phoenix's line in his note:

"I'd only been given one ticket, so I couldn't bring my lucky charm with me. Of course, I'm talking about Trucy."

That part just killed me. It was so funny. Then the P.S.:

"If you can, can you use your own money instead of that hundred that I left on the table? That was actually just as courtesy, but..."

It left me chuckling all the way to the end. I wonder what you have planned for seven days for the siblings. Truth be told, if I was given such a large gap of time to find a storyline, I would be scratching my head. But I bid you good luck on this because I really am wondering how you will spin this tale.

P.S. You know, I don't think having noodle soup in the morning is that gross. But that's my perspective because I can usually eat anything and it doesn't matter what the time is. The soup, on the other hand, is very lacking in taste. "

Awesome chapter ya got there! Although it took it about how many days? Don't mean to be rude... heh..heh...

So when can you write up the next chap.? Estimated maybe: 1 week? will that be enough?

Well, if it's still exam day I can wait after your exam:D

Respectively yours,

Geo stelar

Hm, I like the simplicity of this story quite a lot. I liked how you took one simple idea and expanded it to an entertaining story. The Trucy and Apollo interaction was very endearing and sweet, especially when they were sleeping at the end. Although I can't imagine a teacher assigning that many questions...I mean, usually people with that much homework just skip the easy stuff and do the last one, and if they can do it, then they don't need to do anymore. But that's just my logic...

Anyway, if you hadn't mentioned it, then I wouldn't have noticed that it was rushed. Even now, I don't see it. It's just that this type of story isn't the kind that goes into critical details where you HAVE to read about every sequence, but just jumps where important, and I'm quite fond of reading stuff like that.

I had read this story earlier, but it wasn't until now that I could leave a review, or even understand the ending. The whole spring break thing just left me scratching my head until today when I realized what you meant. I guess it just wasn't too clear in my head. P But now that I get it, I can let out a laugh.

Apollo's personality, I thought, was dead-on. I really do share his feelings towards textbooks and the such, so I could really relate to this. And I think that's what was important, no? But if you were trying to get the endearment twinge in the reader's hearts, I don't think you quite hit the nail on the head. Something...special...was lacking in that area, but no worries. It was still a pretty good story.