Wow this is really good so far. Write more! There should be more stories on Ari

I Luved your story. It really was shocked how jeb was so calm. I always thought a man like Jeb might express his feelings but he does not.

I think you did a really good job with this...Ari's perspective was so well done, so sad and heartbreaking, it really made me feel bad for him. Good job with this, and I added it to my C2, I hope you don't mind.

O.G.

Omg so good, but so sad... I'm in tears... Ari stories are always so sad... But please keep writing...

Not bad. It's a good start. It seems like it'll do pretty well. At least, I think it should. It was a good twist that Jeb was all freaking out and falling apart, because in most stories I've read they always make him well, you know, strong, resistant and never really has break downs or anything and doesn't even show any care for Ari at all. I thought it was pretty good. Keep up the good work. Update soon.

~Kristen

I love the story idea. Nice work.