Spoink ,drenched bluff ,retrieve pearl ,end of dungeon 7f.

awesome. But I think it would be cooler to wake up as mew, but oh well.

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LOVE IT!Sque its great so i hope u update!

I hope that you update soon on this story and possibly some of the other ones! I like this one, mainly because I'm in the Pokemon Mystery Dungeon mood. *sneaks DS and starts playing Explorers of Darkness*

Awesome awesome aesome awesome! PLZ carry on wid this!

Having seen it done once and never continued, I have to wonder what the actual point of having freaking LEGENDARIES for a rescue team.

Still, a little of the plot is revealed, if there is one, but hopefully there will.

You describe kinda good, and spelling is great as well. However, the problems arise when you tend to switch between past and present tense. Also, there's a little too much "I" in the story. Yes, it's first person POV, but a lot of the paragraph starts with "I", which looks rather dull.

Also, I find it oddly convenient that Pelipper would happen to show up for no reason (maybe for comical relief!) and give them a bag. Also, I don't really think that mud works as glue, I mean... C'mon, when it dries, it becomes sand, and whatever "glued" together will fall apart.

And to be a bit honest, you give Rayquaza and Lugia little screen time, hence the "Too much I".

-"The with a happy smile and nod, it took off, not without wishing us luck."-

What? The what?

All in all, I can at least see that you're actually TRYING, which is good, but try thinking about the why's and what's, kay?

When will Rayquaza get that Ice Beam?

I liked how she made the base!

i loved it and can't wait to see how she learns to fly

hope she doesn't think she needs happy thoughts to fly lol.

I think the idea for a legendary Mystery Dungeon team is very interesting!

A nice idea you and your sister have brewing here. I look forward to reading some interesting developments as your story progresses...

Lugia's song is the most calming song I ever heard. I like the idea.

this is brilliant and i love it