Update immediately, please!

I am thoroughly impressed by your writing skills. I can only /dream/ of having such a skill. I love the length of these chapters that it keeps me captivated. The emotion in the words is driving me insane. The drama, anger, laughter, meaning behind each word that is written... I hope I can see this story updated. This is something that I would love to read over and over again. I think this story is the best I have ever seen. I look forward to when you next update. I hope you have a great day :3
Neeky-chan

add more stuff with the romance and lemons(haha);-)

this is a really good story! keep up the good work ]

...I can't believe this story doesn't have over 1000 reviews! Just because this story doesn't have the akatsuki incorporated in it (yet? :3) That doesn't mean this story AIN'T AWESOMEEEEEEEEEE!

:DDDD

KEEP ON UPDATINGGG ! XDDDDDDD

Wow... just wow... I fricking love this story! Haruka is just too funny sometimes! Please upate! :))

Xcellent.I almost was going crazy.U fixed kakshi by having him .arigato

OH MY GOSH! I LOVE YOUR STORY! IT'S AWESOME!

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE GET THE NEXT ONE OUT SOON!

:)

I'll write this as a review for the whole story so far.

I really don't mind the long wait as long as you keep this up. Without doubt this is one of the best fanfictions I have ever read, and I'm a very picky reader.

I have to say you have mastered complete the art of dialogue. Each character is given their own voice, and never do they seem unbelievable in their speech. The chemistry between Kakashi and Haruka is very well developed.

I find you have an extraordinary grasp of the characters (not only your own, but also Kishimoto's). I love how you portray Kakashi, I think every moment with him is golden, not from a fan of Kakashi point of view, but from a reader point of view.

One thing I would criticize is the over-use of perverted thinking. While it is true that shinobis do think perverted thoughts, as I'm sure Kakashi and Genma are no exceptions, I do not think making perverted thought a daily routine/an integral part of their personalities is fitting. For example, Genman isn't that big of a pervert. They might fool around and such on their spare time, or tease their fellow female ninjas, but I doubt their teasing would be so blatant and borderlining harassment like that.

While I'm aware it provides comic relief, the overuse of it cheapens the quality of your amazing work. Also, it seems to be forced sometimes, like you put it in because that's what expected of a M rating fanfic. To have Kakashi getting so distracted by Haruka's bosoms in the middle of a mission is not only a bit much, but also out of character. It's selling Kakashi and his Ninja ability a bit short. He might be thinking of it, but to have it distract him heavily is a bit unbelievable.

However, his aloof manner during the day and his growing frustration that finally spilled out during their night-stay in the last chapter is very believable, and one of the most beautifully written moment of feeling/desire-revelation I have ever read. Do not be apologetic for the half-lemon of it. It was perfect, not overdone or understated.

Hope you found this helpful and encouraging. Also hope to read a new chapter soon.

SugaSugashi

It has been a long time, hasn't it?

Anywho, great chapter, I started reading at work and had to finish at home, but it was awesome, I kept cracking up at work and getting funny looks when someone would walk by.

Well good luck with future chapters, I'll still be reading regardless of how long it takes you to update. :)

LMAO I liked this chapter :D (btw I is sorry - I'm too lazy to login right now ;P)

ANYWHOO - I liked it, it was sexy! and way too funny lol

and don't feel bad about how long it took to get the chapter up cuz I'm the same why ' its been almost 2/3 of a year since I last updated my own story! Sometimes life just gets in the way...

forgive my babbling! I just really liked the chapter and that's all you need to know :P

until next til!

~.F.J.

Awesome! Update soon please!

Poor Haruka! I can't believe she lost the bet! And I had so much faith in her!

Ah, I just love Kankuro. He's so hilarious. And Kakashi, priceless.

OH, and love the rant Haruka has in her mind about Temari. SO funny.

Her nieces confuse me though... Is Daisuke's wife not Sayuri's mom or what... I'm SO lost on that part.

Everything else is good though. The perspective change flows smoothly, so I see what you were talking about in my fic.

But GO YOU!

~SimmerSoftly

Awe! Poor Haruka-chan! But LOL at the whole wet shirt thing. That's happened to me before, except at church, and I was wearing a black bra. Complete and utter embarrassment! Plus how perverted and immature the boys were. Like seriously...

:D

Poor Haruka, having to deal with that "dirty, stinkin' bastard".

LOL. Nice work.