Tamaki a blonde not a brunet, just wanted to let you know, but over all I liked this story:)

Tamaki is blond. Other than that it was ok in the first chapter

WHY DO YOU END IT THERE!?

Fun story! WRITE MORE! *DARK SCARY VOICE*

I just thought you might wish to know that Tamaki is in fact blonde. Other than that great story! XD

I love this! So awesome!

I think you rely more on understatement when you tell this story than actually using definite words. It made the story more spontaneous sounding, alive, easier to read.

There is necessary description of course, but I also find it interesting how you omit certain parts of the action, making the narrative more streamlined. Usually, articulation can get slow and omission makes stories choppy, but you balanced the two effectively.

I personally liked the fluff chapter better than the lemon chapter. The lemon had some interesting words in it that I liked, and certain movements that I'd avoid, but it was clearly put together and moved along well.

The "fluff" was somewhat important to ending the story, rather than just letting the sex scene suffice. I always like reading the afterwards.

Haha. Go Nekozawa! Hehe, we all know that Tamaki wanted him just as much. He only said no to be difficult. XP

The fluffy was so cute! I love both chapters.

I like the story, but Nekozawa wasn't wearing a shirt to grip, lol (at the end)

it's an extremely pleasent story, that kept the characters, well, in character. thanks.

LOVES!~3 Seriously, good stuffs in here, _Grin_. And to think I only clicked on it because I'm terrified of spiders, lol.

YYWKMN.

tamaki is blonde

i think u should have made it longer!

awesome i love this fic

ok first i want to point out Tamaki is a blonde not a brunette and besides that, good job, very good story