beautiful.

This was very good! I really liked it!

Awh this was such a cute story. I really liked how you bolded hard and fast and italicized soft and gentle, it really emphasized Xiaoyu's inner turmoil and feelings towards Jin. Anyway this story had me grinning at the end, so cute! Hehe

I thought I'd look at some of your other fics also. My same criticism for this stands in that Xiaoyu does not seem the swearing type, however again I stress that your writing has changed since then as though you learnt the lesson on your own. The formatting's interesting but it doesn't detract from the story. Good job.

LOL are you kidding me? "Not out of character"? Xiao doesn't swear like a sailor, dear. And this is shit compared to the recent Xiaoyin's I've posted.

will u make a sequel of this pliss? i know its one shot, but this is so good! not out of characters at all

Oh my gosh! This is so beautiful written! How come I have just found it now? Oh my! "Just talk to her",,"I just did..." are awesome! Its the killer! hahaha..I totally love it ,

AW! Too cute!

Xiaoyin is a favorite pairing of mine and your portrayal was flawless. Very in character, especially Xiaoyu. I also loved the style and flow of it, especially the usage of 'hard', 'fast', 'soft', 'slow', and 'gentle'.

AH! So cute! So heart-pounding! I love it! Kawaii!

Good- it was different. Xiao seemed like a modern-day teen.

It's nice-I liked it! It was just a little awkward how she used the f-word a lot. Not that it offends me, I just don't use it myself. But it's good, so nice work!

Finally.. ahem, gosh, I loved it. A lot. Usually whe a word is used repetedly through a fic, it's damn tiring, but you've used 'hard' and 'fast' in such ways that instead of the words fitting in with the story, the story is around the words.. sorry, but can't find a better way to explain it.

And I loved the opposites underlined. This was really different.. in a great way.. and the ending's kinda hanging. Muahah, brilliant.

Enchanting.

Good tone, and the play with the font styles does the trick. Personally, I might have opted against using f-ck, as it changes the register, and instead, used stronger nouns to describe the feelings behind the word.

Beautiful writing!

lmfao! whoa baby! that was hilariously good!

Nice 1 sh0t. you should do more xiaoyin next time! can't wait for more xiaoyu and jin action! :P hehe