Wow this is really, really good. Please update soonn !

Wow, I have never seen such bizarre OCs before. Really, they are just crazy, certainly not in a bad way, but still definitely the most creative OCs I have come across. So some constructive criticism: find a synonym for subordinates. You use it a bit too often and I'm sure there are other more appropriate ways to express what you mean that you could throw in there every now and again. Also when you are writing a quote inside a quote, as in a character is talking and they quote someone else, use " then ', not " and " back to back. It looks silly and is incorrect. Besides those two nitpick things I haven nothing else to say but well done. I love your writing and at the moment I can't remember what the summary was but I have enjoyed what little plot development there has been so far. Please try to update more rapidly then you have been. I was lucky enough to have read all three of these chapters at once but from what I can tell this is on almost an annual update schedule. Yikes.

it's interesting so far and really really well written but I felt that some parts were boring and uncessesary such as that huge paragraph just for describing a photograph

This is rhagorol.

.. Blood? Mustang? NOOOO!

Damn ~ I don't see why you're complaining about your writing style, if more people could write like you then the world would be hell of a lot better a place ;)

One chapter and i'm hooked :O

Update soon?

I dont know if you were going to continue rewriting this, but please do! What happens to Roy?

Waah, I'm reading this for the first time, and it seems very good. I cannot wait to find out what happens next.

U BETTER CONTINUE THIS STORY! i love it! pleeeaase!

You think your bad for saying un i say it at the end of every sentance(unfourtanatly for me cause it pisses my friends of most of them) this chappy is epic i wish i had thought of this.

Pfft I was half expecting both of them to be preg. I Think I may have to die but not of bridge jumping. I would die of laughter XD.

liek, OMG!

WHY ARE YOU NOT WRITING MOER?

UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE

Chocolate After Midnight 0.o I did that, and I didn't get to sleep for 2 days. I went down stairs to eat something at like 3: P.M and like 20 minutes later my mom finds me asleep on floor.. I didn't even make it to a chair! Great story so far! -goes and gets choclate-

aw! youre evil. EVIL! im gonna cry now.

Please don't discontinue this story. I see much promise in it. Besides, it's refreshing to finally see one where Roy is the pregnant one and not Ed. So please, don't give up on it just yet. _