This was not very well written but with more practice and perhaps some close attention you could improve. I'm usually the type that goes for sad or depressing endings. But as I read flaws in logic, character description, setting description, and a believable flow of events truly did distract from your plot. It felt rushed and not thought through.

Dear God, I feel like I was punched in the gut after reading this fanfic, then slapped again for feeling a tear wanting to slide out from my eye. Poor sweet, innocent Lee, you didn't deserve any of that...

This fanfic was beautifully written, I really didn't except "Gai" to actually be Kisame, I just thought Kisame had done something horrible to him that would replace his happy and loving attitude for something cold and merciless. Bravo! This is going in my favorites!

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this story is so sad! i cried! but it was amazingly written!

Wow even though i know this is a fanfic of a fictional show no less my heart is paining me. Molto Bene is all i can can think of to say about this fic it was amazing.

in the kunai part I really was feeling like I was stabbed in the guts! it's so dramatically sad but I liked it in a way...

this was so sad, yet so GOOD. poor Lee! *hugs him*

So sad! Kiasame is so evil! I never knew! I felt so sad when kisame said he killed Gai, the Sakura because Lee was hurt the most. And then he KILLS HIMSELF! *claps* GENIUS! and yes, i am still a little teary.

OH SO SAD!

I'm crying...

that was really good, but i thought it was a little too dark

i'm all good with yaoi but...yeah it's just too dark

Aww...that was so sad.

wow so sad...