Really interesting!And I like the way you write!
There is one thing I am always missing in stories about Vegeta's youth. His struggle to kill innocent and weak creatures. Of course he gets used to it after years under Frieza, but not in the beginning.

This story was great! I always appreciate when authors give insight to vegetas teen years. There's so much mystery about his life that the possibilities are endless. Very well done! I was sad about Nara... Poor kid...
Well I want to say thank you for sharing, I enjoyed reading this very much.

Interesting.

I can't read this anymore... I... BOLD/ITALICS "I", was vegetas first and most memorable lay. As special as bulma but in different ways. Lol. Seriously, when I imagine his young escapades, the women are always a variation of me. Heck, bulma is just my reborn self.

Hey- Yook your advice and wandered on over to to read the full - unedited- story. God, I can't tell you how much I hate that site with it's crappy search engine- Took me 15 minutes to go through reams of pages to find your story... but it was worth the search. There's no comparison between the two. Just the same, I'll leave my review here, thank you very much. "Child of Desire" was an excellent story and I want to thank you for posting it. Cheers!

This is a great start to the story! I love the descriptiveness and the characters. I'm going to read more tomorrow, I've been staring at the screen for too long today already... but I love this so far!

wow, i liked the story, is beliviable and you are a nice writer!

The thoughts and actions captured my atettion until the end, and this isn't often..Whatever, continue your works...

Ouch, that hurt. I could feel both their pains. What Temy did at the end was merciful, even if it was hard to read. Great chapter, very dark, like I know you like it )

Great chapter once again. The developement in Vegeta is not only incredibly well written, but it seems extremely believable too. I like how Nappa and Raditz both look at Vegeta as their lord as well as the child they grew up protecting in a sense. Is Temy going to come back into the story? This is only the beginning of the story I know, but I was just curious.

I have to say, that after reading your work off mediaminer, I didn't think it could be any better and I am pleasantly wrong. You are an amazing author. Simply put. The sex scenes were just the right length, not so short as you would blink and miss something, and not to long to take away from the main focus of the chapter. Not to mention they were very steamy pieces themselves! I enjoyed this chapter, and find it somewhat comical how Temy can't stand Nara but still allowed her in her bed. I can understand why she would be so frustrated. I wouldn't want to be interupted during my fantasies of Vegeta either...

I have to say, after reading this I have to hop over to mediaminer. It's so hard to find a decent VxOC and this one is by far the best one I have ever read so far. Your writing style is wonderful and I just love your descriptions of everyone's emotions. Well done!

Wow, very descriptive! You certainly have a way with words!

Very interesting. This story sounds promising. Its very well written and your OC doesn't seem to be a mary-sue, and extra 10 points for that. You have deffinitely caught my attention with this one, very original. I hope to see an update soon, this story is very good.

-Vlade