I really enjoyed your story. Over all I found the fire between Beth and Josef to be very believable. I always saw it when I watched the show. Granted I've written on here a few times and readers always want you to get the the 'fun' part quickly :) You have a lot of talent in here so I wanted to mention that to you before I said anything you may not like. It is not my intent to make you feel bad as I give you my opinion. I just love to read.

First, this was a great fun read, the only thing I felt, after finishing and this is just in passing because its so minor, was Josef and Beth paired fairly quickly. You could change the names and publish this also. I sat through this entire read years later after you wrote it :) in one sitting and I don't often do that. I like to always leave good detailed reviews when I do. If you do publish-even for fun-work that burn a little longer. You had a perfect vibe going there. Also, it seems like you wrote this fairly quickly which is also a plus. There were hardly that many errors (words not found my a document reader because they were spelled right).

Lastly, I was thrown a bit by the Dynasty thing. Foreshadow a little more with that because it came in quick and ended just as fast, or work it in sooner so the reader feels connected to it. Have a sub plot detailing more of the baby vamps causing havoc and tying it in to Josef and Beth's plot. You have 21 chapters already, adding anything in could fill the word count. As it is, it was one of the best Moonlight Fic's Ive read. I know a lot of us do this for fun, but I really feel like yours has that 'book' element to it and the only reasons I even offered what I've said. For fun, this is fantastic! Once I got here was the only time I was a little unsure of where you were going with the plot and it felt a little out of place.

A little more reaction between Josef doing the wrong thing (as in should he fight himself more) and Beth being so eager (why is she so eager), and Mick just accepting his friend's actions (why would he just give up on Beth and accept she and his best friend had sex) Work his angel that pushed her away to begin with. Also ask what was it about Beth that so moved Josef to risk losing his friend Mick over her.

I like your story,though the chapters are a little short. I feel there could be a little more build up,sexual tension if you will.

The conversation between Brenda and Josef was not true to character. Josef never worked for anyone HE is the boss. other than that I like the story! I love Josef and Beth together! Thanks

This was a nice story. Thank you!

Oh man! I am so sad that I have to stop reading but i will be back soon so expect more reveiws!

omg i can't wait! Must read!

I've always liked the josef/beth pairing. and I really like this story, I must continue reading!

Have Beth working somewhere and Nickolas show up. She gets hurt and josef has to decide if he should turn her or let her go.

*sigh* Ah - Josef... yummy!

I just loved it! I never thought about a Josef/Beth pairing before...nice :)

This was a great story! I'm thinkin of writing a moonlight fic myself! Can't wait to read the sequel...

good work.

I'm glad Mick's not holding a grudge. I'd hate to see them loose the best most functional relationship either has ever had. :)

Jessica

:)

this was a good ending. in the sequel part of me wants mick to be angry and fight for beth, and the other part doesn't since she is with josef..

i can't wait to read your sequel...

i loved it! it was wonderful and i cant wait to read the sequel!

:)