... I have no words, truly, the magnum opus of a genius. I am crying. I don't know why.
Simply...amazing, si heartwarming and touching, and sweet, yet melancholy, and sad, yet joyful, and hopeful, but hopeless, and so very, very, very touching. and yet also soul-searching, painful, agonizing, to see such beautiful characters reduced to such a state...but perhaps that is where their true beauty lies.
And above all, a ring of sorrowbutnotsorrow.

I don't know.
did any of what i wrote make any sense?
I just don't know.

Amazing work. I have no words.

You were amazing. This was really well thought out, although it wasn't much of a plot. Your writing style is amazing though, but I can spot some occasions you split the paragraph wrongly.

nice story and quite well written.

The ending sent shivers down my spine... i dont usually get that. :D

I read this about a month ago and only now have to the guts to review it. Depression is a good word for what this made me feel, the solumness of the story is so beautiful and ending so sad.
10/10
Unreal.

I liked the story so much, I've copied it just in case it ever gets deleted from the interwebs.

Chao's the good side. Obviously. I would've fought for her and never looked back.

I remember reading this once before a long time ago, and it is still one of the best Negima fictions I have read. It makes me feel incredibly sad. In a dulled horrified way. All hope and all dreams which are so characteristic of Negima are lost so completely, snuffed out. (the contrast) The extinguishing of in essence magic in all its definitions, literal and more abstract. The horrors that have befallen these characters (,the Earth and its people). it makes me feel like a cold heavy steel weight has lodged itself in my chest. this post apocalyptic world grinds love and friendship and everything else that used to triumph in the face of adversity to dust and the scars, the scars. when Asuna died, and Konoka died, and when Setsuna lost faith. the war and torture and destruction and Eva and Setsuna adrift as such lost barely-survivors. Just the fact that there is no fixing it. there is no saving them. (and not even THEM, and that makes it even worse, for what about THEM?, and then it doesn't work anyway.) when Setsuna flies at last when she has lost Eva, I...it is the perfect act of abandonment.
yes. so. it was really good. it also makes me feel really awful. x)
good job I would say.

Beautiful.

I love every word of it 3

Dear lord, this is the most touching thing I've read this month.

Makes me want to prevent this bad end by any means possible.

*Minor* correction. The world rotates about its axis, travels around the sun, whirls through the Milky Way galaxy, and, finally, shoots outward along with the rest of our galaxy across this great expanse known as the universe. That's not even counting the effect the continually expanding boundaries of said universe has on the rather elastic nature of the space matter occupies. To the point, saying that she does not travel through space when time-hopping is not merely incorrect, but outright ridiculous. If she really was not traveling through space, then even an instant back in time would leave her to the cold mercies of vacuum, where the fifteen seconds or so of consciousness she had left would be about as pleasant as drowning in really cold water, with the added pleasures of her eardrums rupturing and the saliva in her mouth beginning to boil. Fortunately, being based more on fantasy than science, you have the easy out of magic. Just say it's linked in some way to the planet and yadda yadda 'spacial recognition' yadda. Easy peasy.

Taking a look at the grammar and spelling I'm pleased to say I didn't notice anything, which at least signifies that any mistakes are likely minor (there are always mistakes, even if there aren't, it's just a matter of when you give up looking for them ;). However, in terms of presentation, I did notice you have some rather oddly placed new lines, which led to some confusion on my part. For example:

Setsuna sighed. (new line)

"Are we really people?"...

New lines generally signify at least a small change in topic, or a change in speaker. Your habit here makes it a little difficult to follow a conversation sometimes because the reader must backtrack to verify who is speaking. Remember, grammar isn't there to make your life miserable. Rather, it is meant to bring together your meaning and my understanding. Even if the rules sometimes seem arbitrary, the fact that they are generally agreed upon is useful in and of itself. If there is no way for you to properly express yourself within the given boundaries, then it is acceptable to create new rules for yourself. If you are clever enough in your creation, they may even become standard use. After all, language is a living entity, not an exact science. If you'd like an example, then perhaps, had you been trying to intensionally create confusion as to the identity of the speaker, or the meaning of the conversation itself, then new lines seemingly randomly placed could have been useful.

Turning to the true meat of the story, I think you'll be pleased to know that I was quite taken with it. It was sad and it was sweet and the emotions and motivations (or lack thereof) really shone through. In all honesty, I feel more in tune with your rendition of the characters than I ever did with the original work (though I feel that is in part due to the limitations I feel comics have as a medium). All in all a definite favorite.

An excellent excellent exploration piece.

Like how you left out any detail whom Negi may have actually ended up with, yet involve Chao, and Eva's passing unkown The relation between Setsuna and Eva was also very appropriate and the moods played were right somehow, complex but comforting if ever they were left to be the only ones.

I was wondering if someone had made a fic concerning Setsuna after Konoka's time. You did well, though I would think she'd think back on that detail more - then again maybe she does think alot of Konoka with all her free time, or too far back now even to remember how much it hurt to think back on it at all...

sorry for the late review ;P

i really liked your story! it's beautifully written & everything flowed so nicely that i couldn't stop reading

the angst was almost perfect

i especially loved the ending, very well done

hope you keep up the great work ;)

Soo pretty! It was beautiful. Beautifully sad.

There's not much I can really criticize... Spelling, grammar, punctuation were fine.

It was really good. I liked it. ;D

Beautiful...

I shall submit a more in depth review later...

My god, i'm crying...

Bravo! Bravo!

Jaw droppingly brilliant. Amazingly so. Though, I'm sure Chao's meddling must've made some different and/or awareness that Negi could've used to prevent he future. Or maybe it was jus that meddling thatade the world like that in some sort of time paradox. Ugh, brain hurts...

Again, brilliant story. Bravo. :)