You know the cinematic story very well, and it clearly shows in your writing. You also had insights into Edmund’s character that I appreciated. Thank you for writing.

Amazing. I literally sat and read this all the way through. You captured Edmund's character and his struggle marvelously.

I liked how the ending wasn't happy, but it wasn't sad either. Edmund's on the mend. I liked the conversations he had at the camp with his siblings. It's mentioned in the book, but not shown in the movie nor mentioned in many fanfictions.

I also liked how you had the Narnians not quite forgive him at first, and the bit with Oreius pledging his life to Ed. It wa sweet :)

Just read the whole story. You did justice to Edmund story. The one thing about fan fic is that we can write about events in Narnia that CS Lewis didn't he told us his story. Just as you have told yours. A great story and well written and i enjoyed it very much.

Worth not doing my homework for~!

I enjoyed all of this so much.

Thank you!

really good story!

Love this.

So much.

The Characterization seemed spot on, to me. :) And I loved the characterization of the minor characters, as well! Glorious!

Definitely faved. :D

~Ayaia

Beautiful, beautiful story.

Beautiful story! I really enjoyed it! This is one of those stories that reminds me why I LOVE Edmund. He can bring so much angst to the table to write about. And you did this well. I loved all the looks into parts that hadn't been shown in the movie (or in the book). LOVED this story! Great job for your first one!

Another beautiful chapter!

Reason why I love Edmund, potential for such angst. I'm looking forward to the rest of the story!

Beautiful chapter!

I love your version of the conversation with Aslan!

Giles genius. Especially since Edmund was trying to save him, it's nice to see him come back. Thanks for a great story!

I love your character study of Edmund. You do a great job in this story. Best last words, ever!

One quibble: blood tasting like copper. I really don't agree. And since there isn't any appreciable copper in blood, I don't really know why it should. Just my opinion.

Overall - fabulous job. You have managed to bring something new and awesome to a much-handled passage.

HEY! we had a chat on thurs...well when i say chat i mean talked non-stop about books for an hour... yeah so iv made an account..whith much yelling at the computer and stampiing my feet and tearing at my hair (littrally) but i cant write any stories until sunday ten fifty! ARGH! halp! iv read a little bit of regret but not that much beacause my brothers blasting me outwhith ceebeebies! DOUBLE AGH! if i hear another song from third and bird i will blow up the telley! see you later tho!

"Evil sometimes wears a pleasant face," is a wonderful insightful line.

This is such a moving chapter, full of emotion and raw feelings.

Great work! Oreius is brilliantly portrayed and his compassion is awesome. You make Edmund so real!