Man I loved reading this fanfic. Probable the very best out of all of them. It would be cool to see more chapters. Well ill be sure to keep a watchful eye out for this story (hopefully if still continues). Anyway Good luck!

Its hard to find a meaningful, well written fanfic. Then i thought ''oh yeah that one guy who wrote Detective Tenma-chan'' There are other good authors ,but ive read nearly 2/3 of all SR stories. Anyway i like your work with this series so far.

i wan to see more keiichi and mikoto

my favorite couple is Keiichi/Tenma, HarryTenma or AdelTenma.

or Keiichi and Tenma 3

Harry and Tenma 3

Hehe, n.i.c.e., but the plot of the story seems to be o. . All in all, I agree with hamdi ( wor... he's a good commenter, *salute*) but don't give up, all his jabbering will not be in vain coz all of it are quite (well, we could say totally) true. Still, keep up the high-above-average masterpiece of yourz.

one of the best school rumble fics, i have read

so keep up the good work

Not as funny as the ones before.

But it makes good foundation for the next chapters to come

Try to reduce musicals a little, since those who don't know the songs won't get the feeling of it.

All that's left is to use proper refering between characters.

other than that, Excellent job.

Go for it!

Nicely composed.

Though Lala usually holds Imadori by the head and not the collar.

Each report of the three was well conveyed according to the personality of each one (especially Harima).

Now you should start making plots that wouldn't be solved immediatly (like the Perv misunderstanding that's still not solved).

You should try and put more class paticipation, you're doing well so far, but try to create a situation were the whole class is involved, and it wouldn't hurt to involve Takano, I haven't heard alot about her lately, she doesn't participate as a main character, but she usually creates new plots.

One more thing, try to make each character refer to the other by the way it does in the anime, especially team tenma, you got some mistakes in that matter in the first few chapters, just keep it in mind.

And as I said earlier, as long as a chapter is fillerless, it doesn't matter how long it is.

Nice commitment to updating regularly, keep it up!

You've got a good story, but I think you are slipping a little too far away from Harima... then again what do I know.

I like how you use the same format as the actual anime and the random and strange events along with the misunderstandings is just like the real School Rumble. I also like the fact that you don't Americanize your fic like most people do and it's obvious that you know a lot about Japan and Japanese culture.

One question, from what I gather this isn't a Harima-Eri fic, so is this a Harima-Tenma or Harima-Yakumo story?

Hope to see your next chapter up soon.

Respectfully

J. H. Kamiya

Nice one!

though the crossover needs some more explaining

Also, try to use universal language in fights.

I have some high expectations of the next chapter

go for it!

Sorry for the late review.

Good going there!

You're doing well so far, avoiding misunderstandings at places where they would be easily seen coming.

However, there are some points you're overlooking:

1-The story revolves almost completely around keichi, even when he's not around, the people who are there would be talking about him, the scenes which doesn't include him in any way are relatively rare, try making several storylines at once, each handling one, two, or even three characters, other than keichi, this is how Kobayashi's doing it, though he usually involves Harima in it one way or another, but it wouldn't be revolving around him though, it wouldn't be wrong to revolve about him if this was a fighting fic, but at school life you shouldn't ignore the other characters.

2-Just as I said, you're ignoring the other characters, I'm really starting to miss 2-C's legitimate City Hunter, Imadori, though I don't really li

E the way he operates, he's a valuable source of comedy, not to mention 2-C's Buddha, Nishimoto, his way of 'being a man' and 'enjoying life' is a little twisted, but it's an excellent source of laughs, don't forget the others, like Mai(really miss the voting power), and I'm missing Tougou, don't put them all at once, but try to involve them when appropriate, the world doesn't revolve about one character, especially if that character wasn't challenged internally (Had something that keeps him away from something or someone or made him act a certain way), you can get their cards from the manga, they'd really help you understanding the mind set of each character.

3- You're ignoring the main pairings, like Tenma loving Karasuma, if I'm not mistaking, you haven't even mentioned him in a scene yet.

4- I'm not sure if this one is on purpose, but so far, you haven't mentioned anything about Yakumo's feelings for harima, even keichi -who's supposed to have esper powers- didn't find out about it yet, I really don't think it's a good Idea to ignore this one, ignoring Eri's feelings for Harima is okay, since one can call it an internal conflict, though you can use it in the fic, which you already did somehow.

5-This is my personal opinion, but I think you should reduce the 'erotic comedy' in your fic, try some "clean comedy" for a change.

To sum it up, you need to add more dimensions to the story, add one or more improvement at a time as you see fit.

And please don't take this for a flame, your fic is something I rarely see around, it's just that I think you can do even better than that.

Looking forward to your next chapter

Good luck!

And never give up!

Quite frankly, this Keiichi guy is really starting to piss me off. He's an asshole.

Good one!

though I think that this misundestand ding is a little bit too strond, it still is reasonable.

Tenma needs some processor implants for the future.

keep it up

and never give up!