This is a good story.

busted! Cute story! Love that they hid him in the wardrobe of all place! LOL!

Nice first chapter. Seems like a good fic!

Please Continue the story!

Hey!

Interesting story... I think it has some potential, but personally I don't feel that it is very realistic. If Lucy is naming the dog Tumnus, then they've already been to Narnia. As such, they would be a lot more mature that they are acting in this story. For instance, they wouldn't disobey their parents just because the dog was starving. They would ask to feed and keep the dog...

That was just my thoughts on this story so far...

-Tamm

Aw what a cute story please continue it I want to see what happens next

aww! Poor Kids! This is coming along nicely aned I'm glad they can keep it.

Well, I do think the post-Narnia Pevensies would be a bit more mature (they'd know they'd be found out eventually) but other than that this is a good story. It's light and well-written with an engagine plot. I wonder what happens next...

Aww, poor kids. I hope they get to keep the puppy. This chapter although good,seemed a bit short.

Story/Characters: 7/10. The idea is cute - maybe a little too much so, in fact, but that's fluff for you. I don't think that the first part of the chapter is strictly necessary, though and your characters are a little cutesy/happy.

Creativity: 7.75/10. The idea is pretty original, though this sort of feels like typical family bonding stuff.

Writing: 7/10. Your writing doesn't have many mistakes, but you could use way more description.

Believability: 7.25/10. I think that Lucy comes off a tad bit young in this and the idea of a husband in the 1940s making breakfast threw me off a little - maybe if you'd explained it, it wouldn't have been so bad.

Overall: 7.25/10. It is a cute fic, though it doesn't stand out that much.

Professionalism: B . I'm not sure why this story isn't being posted by the author, but the summary and notes work well.

Aww! how cute how sweet! I LOVE IT!