This is absolutely lovely. :happy sigh: A great moment. Thank you. :D

yumi-maki,

This was delightfully sweet! Loved how you kept the words and descriptions to the bare minimum and yet still manage to keep both Shikamaru and Temari in character. It came across beautifully Lovely style; fine simplicity!

Keep writing!

sweet ;D

Wow... I just realized... I've never written in second person! O.O;; I must do that some time... A sweet fic by the way. Sweet as in cute, not sweet as in "suwet dude!" -_-;; that was ooc of me... I love watching the clouds when its nice out.. . unfortunately, the ground is covered in snow at the moment, so I can't do that right now...-_- stupid snow, all cold and hard... well, I'm off to read more of your fics now!

Excellent job! Well done!

A very sweet story that conveyed so much in such a short amount of words. Very Peaceful

Wow that was soo peaceful story is uhm kind of relaxing, u know after school,going to the pc and reading this story makes u feel better , and I see u wrote this story in the second person,am I right?Hm that was cool cuz I don't read that style everyday.

Keep wrting!

P.S. When r u gonna update ur story "Haunted"?

nice! really peaceful!

Very nice. Enjoyed the little moment of quiet, and the portrayal of both the characters was well done. Thanks for sharing this!

I just love how you described everything. It was very detailed, imaginative and descriptive, but it didn't ramble on with page after page of describing one thing. The moment that ou created there sounds peaceful, enjoyable and real. Keep up the good work!

And thank you for such a nice, gentle, and peaceful piece. :)

I think you managed to convey the peace very nicely. Even better I like the way you wrote in second person.(I've never tried it, and I haven't seen much of it. But the ones that I DO see aren't written very...*shrugs* I don't know, second person usually turns me off, but it worked quite nicely here)

Yay for ShikaTema. _

~Jenni~

Wow. Half a page of writing and it's all...wow...you definately managed a sense of peace. For me, anyways. Well, as close as you can get because my house is never quiet. XD This was great! And I love the point of view - uh, how it was written - uh, all the 'you's', instead of 'he's' or 'I's'. You don't see that much anymore! Well done!

What a pretty and peaceful scene.

I couldn't see it, but it seemed pretty, somehow.

Sigh...

It was very well written, and if peaceful was what you were trying to accomplish, you did it!

I can feel the peace and fresh air. lovely.