Freaking great story

If there was ever a good, believable, dark EVA fic, this is it.

Great work on this

Awesome, I hope you do a story where shinji puts the screws to seele. Great stuff!

wwhen i see this story as a movie in my inner eye

it's one of those i like the most

Vengeange, big Boooms, and epic one-(or more-)liners used like the bullet-time in 300

Holy Crap, you crazy jarhead! That was a gawdaweful, briliant, badass, blood soaked, fanfic! Oh, and yes...the Abrams does make an excellent door breeching methood. Though every time I've done it for you crunchies there really isnt much of a building left. Not like you guys ever complained...most of them had a woodie so big they couldnt walk afterward. But anyway...thanks for the story!

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Great story you have here. The action is top-notch as were your attempts at drama. The whole delusional angle could have been milked a bit more but the story didn't suffer from not doing so. I like how you led up to the violence in stages, so many author's try to jump right into action without building a story first and just confuse the reader. By the way, I have to say that I liked the author's notes as much as the story! I'll definately be checking out your other writings.

Thanks for the great story,

Aedan

Plus Shinji has Rei to keep him grounded, while Gendo had noone except Akagi but he was just using her. Shinji actually likes(ed) Rei as a friend/lover so I would see him as haveing a more stable base and Rei would keep him on the straight and narrow for the most part I hope you write a sequel to this sometime.

This was a good story, darker, and more violent than I usually read, but you kept it together

(so many violent stories are just there for the writer to blow off steam, and what little plot there is is angsty & irrational)

Oh and as to your comment about kids these days not being disciplined enough - it doesn't matter if you talk to them or 'knock them around the Irish catholic way' (as you put it) so long as you pay attention to them

Nowadays, kids grow up with two working parents who ignore their kids except to buy them expensive presents by way of apology. Is it any surprise that the kids end up like Shinji (the canon one)?

Damn. And here I'd given up on finding anything decent to read on FFN.

One suggestion: Read up on the difference between "then" and "than". "Then" is temporal (time-related), "than" is comparative. "Mary did this and then she did that." "Mary is smarter than Jim."

Content-wise, I really enjoyed how you handled Shinji's transition from normal-ish person into hardcore soldier. You did a good job on the way you revealed more and more about the character as time went on. You really nailed "show, don't tell." If I had to point out anything negative, it might be your attempt at mystery. It was a good shot, don't get me wrong, but it almost felt forced, like we were jumping around from enemy to enemy almost on a whim. Up until when Touji was captured worked pretty well, but the whole "Asuka did it" bit seemed almost tacked on. If you could smooth that transition and add some more clues earlier on in the story, that might help.

This one is a little bittersweet and sad. It seems that the life of the Ikari's has gone full circle.

this sucked

Question: Anklets are Evil.

(DCAU Joke)

This'd be a hell of a story to do a sequel to. You thinking about it? Anyway, the more I read, the more I like your stuff. It's gritty, cruel, and it's got hella style. I especially like your one -sentence conversation model - did you ever read 'Fear' by Tail Kinker? It helped move the story along a lot. I'm slowly going through each of your stories and faving them. I'm also leaving reviews on each one because I don't want to be a cheapskate about it. Pax.

As usual, excellent work Mister C.

Very good author, eagerly wait to read more from you.

Who knows, maybe a sequel to this someday.

Take care.