Omg. That was amazing.

Aww! So sweet! Love it!

Ugh just kiss him already! We all know Sparrabeth is the way to go (: Loves it, although he should've waken up and proclaimed his love for her lol.

I'm not one to favor Jack/Elizabeth stories, but I couldn't help but admire this one. Really great detail! This very well could of happened, the evil movie writers just didn't include it! Curse them! Well, i'm off to r&r your other stories :p

xD I could definitely see her doing that. Very, very sweet little fic - thoroughly enjoyed it. ;D It's the good kind of fluff; the kind that makes you feel pleasantly squidly rather than nauseous. xP

Lovely work, darling; keep at it!

Cheers,

Zay

Beautiful story! It was completely believable and I just loved every bit of it! The descriptions were fantastic, and it was a complete pleasure to read. :3

Ice

Fabulous, short, but perfect. Thanks!

Miz Mooncheese, Here's the deal for me-Elisabeth is destined to be an outrageous old woman with no regrets. My goal entirely although I started late in life. Lovely bit what you writ and sorta sexy as well. She's such a baby at the start and people seem to want her to be with Jack and I'm not sure of it but it does make an interesting pairing. Jack you writ well, sounded like him means good thang and Elisabeth is sweet as a speckled pup with a red bow on Christmas morning. Enjoyed the beloveds, awake or asleep they are a pleasure to be enjoyed.

This is a great take on the island! I love it!

LOVE IT.

this was really great! OMG I loved it! loved this missing piece of the story! so great!

*via 'sparrabeth'*

Like it _

The pacing is nice and relaxed and the words well chosen. One wants to crawl in with Jack and Elizabeth.

I find the idea of Elizabeth's curiosity plausible. Until now I'm still not sure if she was planning for Jack to drink himself into a stupor so that she could burn the rum or whether she thought of that idea later, after she'd exhausted all other possible sources of entertainment the little island had to offer _~

There is one small aspect of the story towards which I'd like to direct your eye: The idea of Elizabeth feeling giddy about lying next to infamous Jack occurs twice, in the middle of the story and near the end. Did you do that on purpose, for example as stylistic means? If not, I'd suggest eliminating one of these nearly identical sentences, as they may be perceived as repetitive.

I enjoyed reading this little one-shot, thank you for sharing!

I certainly like it! This is the first island fic I've liked to be honest. I love the island scene in CotBP, but island fics for some reason usually bore me to death or are too unrealistic. This one would actually work along with how the J/E relationship unfolded in canon. This scene could have happened without changing anything we see in the movies. It covers Elizabeth's fascination with Jack but doesn't count out her feelings for Will. And it doesn't go too far. I really dislike island fics that have Elizabeth and Jack fooling around/sleeping together because I don't think their relationship in CotBP should be any more than it was. So therefore, I think your fic describes quite nicely what Elizabeth might have been doing in the space between Jack passing out and burning the rum the next morning. Very sweet and does justice to both their characters. :-)

Uh... Loved it!

That was very well written. It made me want to crawl into the scene and be Elizabeth.

Lucky girl...

And the sleeping Jack was great. The detail in the snorts and the way the firelight hits his face is perfect. I don't especially like when writers portray Jack as an absolute faultless God when he sleeps. Johnny didn't want Jack to be that way at all.

Here, in the snorts when he sleeps, its a cute little ORDINARY thing applied to the imfamous Jack Sparrow. It humanizes him in a cute way.

Overall, very nice. Enjoyed it. :)

wow. i love it. very well done.