I'm glad that Peter and Holly were able to meet again and that they're both into fencing. This story had a happy ending. And what Edmund said at the end is so typical of him. Classic! I loved it. Great story! :)

I can tell that Holly and Peter are really close. I just felt that this chapter was kind of rushed since one thing happened and then suddenly something else. Like in the beginning of Peter suggested a duel with Miraz and a couple of lines down it happens with little or no transitioning. I hope I'm not being too critical but I felt that I should point that out. But I did like the line about Edmund was close to getting a crowbar to pry Holly and Peter apart!

I hope Holly can see Peter again but it doesn't seem likely since she's too old. Did you change it so they would see each other again? I hope they can find a way to do so. The ending of this chapter was very sad.

Great chapter!

Yay! I'm so happy that Holly and Peter are reunited. And it was pretty funny about what Edmund said at the end and when he sat on Trumpkin. It made me smile.

I just wanted to point out that when you write dialogue that is not a question or exclamation, you end it in a period. Like "Excuse me Your Grace," there should be a comma at the end.

Great chapter! I want to see Holly and Peter's interaction now that they're together again and her interaction with the other Pevensies.

Yes! Holly is back in Narnia. And she brought her friend Margaret, which will make things even more fun. I can't wait for Holly to get reunited with Peter. They haven't seen each other in so long...

And both girls met Prince Caspian. I can't wait for the Pevensies to come in. I'll be reading the next chapter soon!

Great chapter; the only negative thing I have to say is that I felt it was a bit rushed.

I had a feeling that Holly was the knight in the armor!

Aww... Holly and Peter finally kissed. That was so cute. :D

So Holly went back to her own world. I wonder what's going to happen next...

I'll be reading more!

Haha, I liked it when Silver woke Holly up and she said "George Waashington!" I found it very amusing. And Holly and Peter finally met; it looks like they'll be able to get along. I'm glad that Peter's siblings were able to accept her and consider her part of the family.

I'll be reading more!

LOL! I loved that quote: "I passed physical education with flying colors. It'll take a bit more than black magic to destroy THIS American girl."

So Squeaks got a lifetime supply of nuts and Holly got a cool bracelet. I wish I had that bracelet.

I really liked it when Peter and Susan were surprised at what Father Christmas told them and when Lucy asked: "When's the wedding?"

Great chapter! I'll be reading more.

So Holly finally ended up in Narnia. I can't wait to see what happens when she meets the Pevensies!

Hmm.. this sounds interesting. I find it intriguing that a Narnian would stumble into the real world and adapt to life there.

Good, but I would work on the dialect. It is not really period appropriate.

amazing romantic story WOW WOW I want to be Holly please write more

A tip:

It's OK to go for headstrong and all that, but make the other characters act accordingly. Even when she seemed at her worst, no one else seemed to mind at all. Which seemed kind of odd.

Best story ever! Please write about Margaret, or anything about Narnia. You portray it perfectly! I'm so sad the story's over, though

You kind of skipped over parts in the beginning, but once you got into it, this story became amazing! Update soon!

Nope, still pretty darn arrogant. Maybe next chapter?