i'm sure in time i will return to read the next part of Harry's adventure but I've decided after reading the beginning of this chapter to stop here.
its interesting that you decided to keep this one story instead of dividing it out into a series.
for when I return. :P

this is amazing

I know this is old, but I've still got to say thank you, for showing Dumbasadoor exactly as the Machiavellian bastard I've always thought he was!
I don't care if you later show him as merely 'misguided'; I don't believe he was in canon: He (and Rowling) attempted to tell himself and the other characters, that he wasn't as slimy and evil as his actions said he was!
Anyway, good show!
MelJ

You have some truly excellent ideas and some unique plot twists that I really enjoyed. However, your English skills need some strict attention. One cat: cat. More than one cat: cats (NOT cat's). One Potter: Potter. More than one Potter: Potters (NOT Potter's). There are NO apostrophes in pluralizations. This is Primary School English you need to review. Belonging to one Potter: Potter's. Belonging to more than one Potter: Potters' (or Potters's). The possessive requires an apostrophe (with a few exceptions: his, hers, ours and theirs).

Great story with well rounded characters and an interesting plot line. Paying more attention to every word you write will only help improve readability.

Thank you for your contribution to the world of Harry Potter Fan Fiction.

Well, I've enjoyed this, but this is where I leave you. I don't support this pairing (though I knew what I was getting into), and it's as far as I can go.
I liked the reasonings for the things that Dumbledore did (I thought a clean break would be better...used to manipulating... didn't tell about the braille books so as to not control anymore). It was interesting reading about a deaf and blind character. When you had Harry attempt to eat the first time, I was reminded of Helen Keller, refusing to use cutlery...it was neat. I wonder if you did that intentionally, or more just you thought that was how Harry would act?
I think my favourite scene was when Harry sat down in the Great Hall and could feel everyone's eyes on him. That sort of ~magic~ was interesting to me, what I wanted to read. Of course, it's a sadder moment for Harry. But I liked reading it.
Don't get me wrong, I enjoyed this, it's just not going where I'm comfortable reading. I forget if this was still being updated (silly mobile hides the rest of the page from me while doing comments...), and if so, good luck! If you're at the end already, well, I suppose my comments won't change anything. (Hopefully this is still nice to read, though.)

Good story.

Harry is so impulsive!

Brilliant scene with the oh-so-wise Draco.

Sev forgot about Draco's NEWTS. I hope he doesn't forget about Draco's injuries.

Sev should dump him like a hot potato. Nobody should have to put up with an abusive mate who punches them. Harry should consider putting himself into St. Mungo's mental ward either for anger management (with constant check-ups), or permanently because he is totally out of control mentally ill (a danger to himself and others).

I am enjoying the story, except for this: All the way through this, each scene is given twice. Often, a scene is given once from Harry's point of view, then the same scene is given from Sev's point of view. When there is a scene without Harry in it, such as Sev's first big confrontation with Albus, it is given from Sev's point of view, and then later repeated as Sev's memory of the same scene. You are not getting paid by the word, so I'm not sure why you are padding the story to double its natural length. My husband suggested that perhaps you are doing it as a writing exercise. I am imagining that you wanted to try it both ways, to see which was more effective, and then you couldn't bear to throw out anything at all. Are you a hoarder at home with your personal belongings as well as with your scenes? LOL

I hope the author and Harry and Sev all work together to find an appropriate punishment for Albus being such a total asshole. Or just let Dobby take care of him. Dobby might have the most creative ideas. Death is too good for him, and so is the Kiss. Azkaban would be nice, if the Dementors are still around. Too bad a life sentence for a geezer like Albus would not be 150 more years.

Effective description, very powerful scene of Harry waking up in such a nightmare medical situation of being deaf and blind.

This was brilliant!

Yaaaaaay, he's coming home :D